The Abstract Home

[MorpheusSandman]

Silent steps, toes sink in sand.
Waves wash clean what were old worlds.
Stop, look, and breath; In love, out life.

All is still but calls of hills, walls that rise in mist.
All settles over serene scenes, a calm respiteful dream.
Go, look, and see; off land, on seas.

Wind that will not wither rolls.
It cools all fires, caressing cares, cold is seems.
Don’t be, just go; Out doors, in me.

Senses stir, sights will blur.
In distant traces lines lead on to nothing.
Don’t go, just be; Without fear, with me.

I follow where the nothing lives,
Comforting and frightening, enveloping and free.
In darkness where the light will blind,
I’ve found my place in blissful mind.

A tiny spot, a place all mine,
Of shapes and colors, tones and lines.
The edge of life, of love, and dreams,
A place, it seems, for those divine.

Leave, Let go, move on.
Don’t be with me, and I’ll be fine.

[Dark Muse]

I really like this, wonderful use of langauge, and a really interesting style.

[MorpheusSandman]

Thanks Dark Muse. :)

[firefangled]

I like the title of this one. It suits the poem well. The poem has interesting sounds and alliterations and a haunting cadence. Very well done.

[NSAM]

The language flows so well, especially stanza two. The refrain with all those imperatives really amplifies those conflicting emotions. The sense of boundless possibility and nothingness at the same time. I can identify with the sentiments too. oddly i can recall going to the needles in dorset and feeling simultaneously claustro and agoraphobic. its not the best position to be in haha.

[MorpheusSandman]

Thanks to firefangled and NSAM. :)

I'm glad you like the title fire. That was the last thing I did and struggled for about 20 minutes after finishing it to think of one. I think it was the ending that made me think of "home", plus the "shapes, colors" bit that made me think of "abstract".

[islandclimber]

Yeah love the title too... It fits the poem so well... and the flow is just amazing, reading this aloud just makes this poem come to life... and it creates such a sense of conflicting emotions, and confused sentiments, and abstract feelings.. I love it..

[MorpheusSandman]

Thanks islandclimber. :)