The Hoax Called Evolution

[mazHur]

The Hoax Called Evolution
by mazHur

What are these apes doing around?

India, for one, is getting overpopulated;
growing progeny of pariah
macaques and langurs
hopping all around.
This genus of immature primates
flourishes like wild flowers
sprouting on the face of creepers
with the first sign of approaching spring;
flowers would fade and wither
ultimately perish and become
dust with dust;
ever seen a lily turn into a daisy
or a daisy turn into a daffodil;
roses may change colors
lose their fragrance
but not shape;
right, change is for ever but-
but how on earth can apes turn into humans?
what will then humans turn into??
Angels? Oh,no!
light passes into darkness,
darkness into night
but nothing else.
evolution is a fantasy-
a brain child of an idle cleric.
similarities won't make me you
nor you me;
nature has it's own ways of fooling men;
when men cannot comprehend their Creator
they create their own reasons and images;
If Humans had been evolved from apes
you wouldn't find apes and macaques
mimicking men around;
comparing apes with men
would be taken as an affront
by the god Hanuman;
don't tell him evolution progresses in phases,
were it so then he may pounce at you with a retort
saying dreams too progressed
in phases,little by little,
changing hues and forms;
but all this doesn't go to proving
that dreams are always true!
the hoax called Evolution is a half-awake dream;
if apes and macaques dreamt it,they would scream.

[Virgil]

Mazhur, your poetry has gotten much better. The first half of this is very strong. The second I'm afraid evovles into standard argument and standard argument is not poetry. That argument can be left out of the poem becuase it can be implied. If you'll let me cut that weak part out, see if you like it:




The Hoax Called Evolution
by mazHur

What are these apes doing around?

India, for one, is getting overpopulated;
growing progeny of pariah
macaques and langurs
hopping all around.
This genus of immature primates
flourishes like wild flowers
sprouting on the face of creepers
with the first sign of approaching spring;
flowers would fade and wither
ultimately perish and become
dust with dust;
ever seen a lily turn into a daisy
or a daisy turn into a daffodil;
roses may change colors
lose their fragrance
but not shape;
right, change is for ever but-
but how on earth can apes turn into humans?
what will then humans turn into??
Angels? Oh,no!
light passes into darkness,
darkness into night
but nothing else.
evolution is a fantasy-
a brain child of an idle cleric.
similarities won't make me you
nor you me;
nature has it's own ways of fooling men;
the hoax called Evolution is a half-awake dream;
if apes and macaques dreamt it,they would scream.

How's that?

[mazHur]

Mazhur, your poetry has gotten much better. The first half of this is very strong. The second I'm afraid evovles into standard argument and standard argument is not poetry. That argument can be left out of the poem becuase it can be implied. If you'll let me cut that weak part out, see if you like it:




How's that?

Hello Virgil

I always welcome constructive suggestions.
I take your point and appreciate and thank you for clipping the superfluous lines. The poem now looks better, indeed.

rgds
Maz:)

[MorpheusSandman]

I agree with virgil; the first half is quite poetic, the end is just argumentative. I'm a firm believer in evolution though, so I can't identify with the content... I might just propound that, according to evolutionary theory, both man and modern apes came from ancestors that were not either, so man didn't come from apes even according to the theory.*

*I don't want to start a debate, I just wanted to clear this common misunderstanding up.

[Virgil]

I believe in evolution too. I was just commenting on the poetry.

[quasimodo1]

Very well done poem -- very ill-advised concept.

[Pendragon]

Poem is very good, MaZ. :thumbs_up

[mazHur]

thank you very much all of you for your kind appreciation and comments

best wishes
maz