hide not in the shadows

[sundays50]

Hi ot in the shadows,
Peer nfrom;; chalky eyes,
Rattle all the coffins,
Set utter silence,B the trust,
, where :t a sect of lust.
Prop up pansilence fillshed;:umb-throated, in its woe,
Before their door.
God en deis what you learned
And d;ead is w:ht you knew;
And ad you ever heard;
hat.

[Dark Muse]

Haha, I love this


God hath made man equal
So hate them all the same.

That is me right there.

[hoope]

really lovely poem...
and well written

[PrinceMyshkin]

What triumph of anarchic outpouring! I wanted so badly to protest against this line:

to stephanie
Love's but a sect of lust.

But felt that you had justified it by everything that came before ad after!

As for your question:



When dead is what you learned
And dead is what you knew;
And dead is what you ever heard;
What remains is true.
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for the last stanza, i was also considering using -
So, burn your path of chaos
Burn your wild oats fast
Everything you once felt
You know will never last.
-which do you think is better?

I much prefer the one you actually chose, because a) there is such epigrammatic authority in it and b) in the alternate last stanza, the rhyimg of "fast" and "last" just feels too pat, somewhat jingle-like.

However, my congratulations on such a strong poem...