Days without Poetry

[white camellia]

Days without poetry,
a fair leaf on the bough, but dead,

days without poetry,
a petal falls but words of grief inaction surpassed;

days without poetry,
I don’t write or paint anymore, you said.

Love fades, or grows instead?

[qimissung]

It's kind of hard to express grief and loss without becoming maudlin-you have done a fine job of doing so here.

[white camellia]

Hi, qimissung, thanks for your giving a moment to my writing. It's a sort of contemplating rather than grieving. It indeed has a sense of loss but it's not really about something lost. I only wrote a few sentences. I might need it to be longer.

[qimissung]

I read it again...contemplatively...so suitable for this time of year.

[kiz_paws]

WC, though you only wrote a few sentences, how delicate this poem is. No, I'd not lengthen it, it is lovely as it is. Just my opinion, mind you. :)

[Epistemophile]

white camellia, your poem is so beautiful and fragile and for me it can only be praised in poetry. your poem inspired me to write these lines.

days without poesy
and night in my soul
stillness unbroken
here for evermore

nights without love
and love without you
mysterious times
times we never knew

[Pendragon]

Lovely poem. Would have fit the "Subject Poetry Contest" right now... Sigh...

[white camellia]

kiz, that's nice, short but delicate as it is to you.

Epistemophile, I like the lines you wrote. It further expressed my thoughts.

Pen, yes, I've read all those wonderful entries for the contest and the work done by Cellar Door looks quite interesting to me.

[Virgil]

Days without poetry,
a fair leaf on the bough, but dead,

days without poetry,
a petal falls but words of grief inaction surpassed;

days without poetry,
I don’t write or paint anymore, you said.

Love fades, or grows instead?

My goodness, what a lovely little poem. The repetition of the first line works marvelously, despite it being half the poem. The rhyme of "dead," "said," and "instead" really holds things together. And "surpassed" is a slant rhyme too. Nicely done Camelia. :)

[white camellia]

Thank you, Virgil. Glad you like it. Er...expected. ; - ))