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Dark Muse
10-03-2008, 07:23 PM
Autumn's Calling

I can feel the chill of the wind
the sound of the leaves rustling,
like the steps of a ghost
for here there is nothing,

But a sense of loveliness
in the crisp fresh breeze
with air starting to chill,
it is the scent of Autumn
that lingers on.

Beauty of decaying fire
littered here and there
the tingling of rain which
rests heavy in the air.

Dampness so near to the touch
awakened in this rejuvenation
that I might wander like a ghost
and only the leaves will crinkle
in my wake.

I seem to slowly fade
in the bright burning beauty
surrounding all around me
whispering in the rain drops
and breath of the wind,

So who would see me,
made into a simple shade
while I pass these cool stone roads
so sweetly caressing falls new
sensations teetering between
life and death.

ntropyincarnate
10-03-2008, 08:11 PM
Awesome! I felt like I could really see and hear this poem, great job!

Dark Muse
10-03-2008, 08:20 PM
Thank you

eyemaker
10-04-2008, 12:32 AM
A really lovely poem DM:) You made it very realistic and exquisite, the imagery and the structure varies...:D

Dark Muse
10-04-2008, 12:51 AM
Thank you very much

Amylian
10-04-2008, 11:27 AM
I can feel the chill of the wind
the sound of the leaves rustling,
like the steps of a ghost
for here there is nothing,

It is quite a chilly tone if you ask me,lol....good job using both auditory and visual imagery to create what I think a "Reminiscence". Well I am not sure if this is the right word to describe it....

dibyendra
10-04-2008, 11:47 AM
Autumn's Calling

I can feel the chill of the wind
the sound of the leaves rustling,
like the steps of a ghost
for here there is nothing,

But a sense of loveliness
in the crisp fresh breeze
with air starting to chill,
it is the scent of Autumn
that lingers on.

Beauty of decaying fire
littered here and there
the tingling of rain which
rests heavy in the air.

Dampness so near to the touch
awakened in this rejuvenation
that I might wander like a ghost
and only the leaves will crinkle
in my wake.

I seem to slowly fade
in the bright burning beauty
surrounding all around me
whispering in the rain drops
and breath of the wind,

So who would see me,
made into a simple shade
while I pass these cool stone roads
so sweetly caressing falls new
sensations teetering between
life and death.

This poem depicts a vibrant imagery of the nature! Loved it! :thumbs_up

qimissung
10-05-2008, 10:34 AM
Yes, I love the imagery, and you bring to a resounding finale.

Dark Muse
10-05-2008, 12:13 PM
Thank you

Schizo-Manic
10-06-2008, 02:56 AM
excellent poem, beautiful imagery and visual descriptions the topic was executed with perfection. I enjoyed the read good work

Dark Muse
10-06-2008, 03:01 AM
Thank you very much