Taming of Men

[frozencore]

Just something I wrote to get my head clear again. And it worked well the anger, the insecurity, the dizzyness - gone. Now that you know that the poem did its duty allready you can be honest about wether u like it or not. Oh... and tips how to improve are always welcome.


Do you try to make me feel
Or do you want to play with me

Just wait and sit
Melt ice with heat
Don't shatter it
The shards cut deep

If pressed or questioned you attack
Why would you never voice regret

If I can't cope
Who is to blame
I'll stop to hope
and join the game

Joy and pain fill me with life
I rather change my ways than die

But if you leave
the choice to me
I chose to live
in harmony

[lit_head]

that's awesome. i enjoyed how the poem flowed. also the meaning, at least what i gathered from it, was pretty deep. i also write to clear my head. helps a lot. anyway, great job

[Pendragon]

Nice message in a nice poem! Encore!:thumbs_up

[frozencore]

It's always nice to hear some unbiased views and opinions. Glad you liked it!

[Schizo-Manic]

Joy and pain fill me with life
I rather change my ways than die

But if you leave
the choice to me
I chose to live
in harmony
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nice poem this stood out, keep it positive and strive for excellence I enjoyed the read