Its Just not easy

[hoope]

True love marks life..And the love i mean is not incircled in a particular area;
but its wider that inculdes parent's love, friend's love , children's love, nature's love... to love everything around us & appreciate their existance.
This is a poem i wrote..
Hope you'll like it .. AND its dedicated to all those who lost any loved one.

It's Just Not Easy


It's not easy
to live with out you

it's not easy
to say "goodbye forever "

it's not easy
to wake up without you around

it's not easy
to be alone

it's not easy
to live with out you

it's not easy
to say "good bye for ever "

i don't want to live
after you 're gone

My life is meaningless
without you

It's not easy
to be with out you

It's just not easy
to be with out you

But am sure that
i'll always love you .........

[blp]

It's very touching and the repetition of the 'not easy' phrase works well. Perhaps you could find some metaphors or images to express the feelings. E.g. instead of saying it's hard to be without someone, you might say it's hard looking at a their place at the table or their bed or where they used to sit in the car etc. I'm not sure why, but doing this often brings the feelings to life and gives them more resonance.

[hoope]

It's very touching and the repetition of the 'not easy' phrase works well. Perhaps you could find some metaphors or images to express the feelings. E.g. instead of saying it's hard to be without someone, you might say it's hard looking at a their place at the table or their bed or where they used to sit in the car etc. I'm not sure why, but doing this often brings the feelings to life and gives them more resonance.

yea sure i'll do that.. sounds a good idea..
thx alot 4 stepping by & 4 the advice :-)

[blp]

thx alot 4 stepping by & 4 the advice :-)

Glad to. :)

[thegitksan]

Reminds me of Greek poetry, or some of the early English epics, where the lines are chanted out loud. Very frequent repetition of a single line or set of lines. I agree, the repetition helps make this one more memorable.

[romantic novel]

It is very moving ..well-done

when the words come from heart they touch the heart

great poem

[hoope]

the guys .. ur word pushed me forward..
am seriously thinking to share all my poems..

[lina77]

Well done.I too would have tried to put some metaphors to make it a little bit more abstract but it's your work and I find it nice and touching.