Steal!!

[romantic novel]

He steals me from my world to his ...
A different world...
A world where the dream is the sky...
Hope is the stars...and tenderness is the moon.

He lightens my life with candles...
Sprinkles my path with daises...
I fly to that dreamy sky...
I dance, sing and Die!!
Die…because it is a Different World...

In his world, he decided to leave...
Indeed,


He left...
He left where I can't find him...and he can't find me…

Oh God!!
I am stabbed…
Stabbed with his farewell.
How can I live after him?
Does my pain have a cure?

Once my love enhanced..
And my joy, too.
Now is the turn of my pain!!

He left after my tears embraced him…
He left me alone with a broken heart…
A heart wept and wept and wept.
How hard is this life!!
Puts him in my way...then steals him from me.

[PrinceMyshkin]

The last line of this is especially effective, the essence of the entire poem, anger divided between the one who abandoned you and the one or the force who brought him to you in the first place. But really, would you have chosen not to love him even knowing that it was going to end painfully?

[romantic novel]

Thanks PrinceMyshkin for your commetting..

Yeah, this is the reality !!

Even if I knew before that he will leave me..Still I will love him!!

Love knows no bondaries...Knows only suffering and pain...

Still, his love will be a great memory to me...

I wont ever forget his words, smile.....and love


Thanks again :)

[Justin Rockwell]

I really like this, this poem has emotion and excitement in it, it does'nt seem to drag along. Great work.

please return the feedback...

http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?p=622743#post622743

[romantic novel]

Thank JR for your feedback...im happy you like it :)


I will visit yours and leave my impression and comments there :)

[hoope]

He left after my tears embraced him…
He left me alone with a broken heart…
A heart wept and wept and wept.
How hard is this life!!
Puts him in my way...then steals him from me.

i enjoyed readin the poem..
especially those lines.. they r so sad.. & i feel the tears in it..
poems is all about making the reader feel what we write
& i have sensed it in ur poem..
GREAT PIECE