one night with a silent man

[ahsiam]

with an enchanting night
in the voice,
a constant cry is made.
silence it is-
she beholds in her hidden pain
and thats what it is-
that mingle her with this night.



words she had
was what she heard
that he tuned in silence-
and for an audience
who would hear,
with a winter in the mind
must fall in final.



the ultimate obscurity of his presence
is what his silence is
for she made the silence her god!


a prophecy of welcoming a soul
that lives within her
a lust of being a lust in him
and a pale carnage beneath her
leads to an insanity.


noone but within herself-
who lives!
noone she could lose the lust for-
noone that is-
but she believed herself
that he exists.

[PrinceMyshkin]

I confess that I wish I understood the literal essence of this better than I did, but the sense of mysdtery in it is palbable and moving and these lines



but she believed herself
that he exists.



seem to me such an insightful statement of our experience of so much of reality!

[Dark Muse]

This was quite profound and very beautiful

[symphony]

Enigmatic.
That it could not come within my reach, makes it all the more beautiful. Especially

that he tuned in silence-
and for an audience
who would hear,
with a winter in the mind
must fall in final.

[ahsiam]

I confess that I wish I understood the literal essence of this better than I did, but the sense of mysdtery in it is palbable and moving and these lines



seem to me such an insightful statement of our experience of so much of reality!

hey prince thanks for a wonderful comment. i wanted to make the poem a little bit twisted and i am happy it is. :)
again thanks for finding the time for the comment.:)

[ahsiam]

This was quite profound and very beautiful

thanks dark. i am glad you liked my last three poems. it was an inspiration to my next one.

[ahsiam]

Enigmatic.
That it could not come within my reach, makes it all the more beautiful. Especially

are dosto you liked it! i really didnt think that it will be that much twisted that you wont get it. ;)
these lines mean that an audience who will hear a song with a cold mind, must fall into the singer.
i hope you dont hate it now! :p

[Virgil]

I found this a fascinating poem. I can't completely grasp it, but I think I got the general theme. So many wonderful lines, especially the title. And ten this

the ultimate obscurity of his presence
is what his silence is
for she made the silence her god!
"The ultimate obscurity of his presence" is a magnificent phrase!

I will say that the concluding two lines of the first stanza are very awkward, and "noone" is actually two words not one.
But such an interesting poem ashiam. :)

[ahsiam]

I found this a fascinating poem. I can't completely grasp it, but I think I got the general theme. So many wonderful lines, especially the title. And ten this

"The ultimate obscurity of his presence" is a magnificent phrase!

I will say that the concluding two lines of the first stanza are very awkward, and "noone" is actually two words not one.
But such an interesting poem ashiam. :)

Virgil, you made my day for the 3rd time. :D i am really glad that you liked many lines of this poem. To tell you the truth, the stanza you mentioned, is one of my favourite too.
And thanks for the edition. :)
About the last two line of the 1st stanza, i think it was necessary to understand the main theme.


And accept my apology for a late reply. :blush: