Darkdancers

[Mr.K]

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[Justin Rockwell]

This is really good, the structure reminds me of a hip-hop verse from some1 such as Lupe Fiasco or Andre 3000 who use high complexity. Good job man.

please return the feedback...

http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=37748

[lit_head]

i agree with Rockwell. Immortal Technique is another one whose structure and complexity comes to mind when reading this. well done, thoroughly entertaining

[Mr.K]

Thanks for the feed lads. As your pointing out, ive been inspired - among other things - by abstract hip-hop (def jux, aesop rock, cannibal ox, buck 65 ect)

It's intended to be preformed in spoken word.

[allesfliesst]

a poem like a tank. which is a compliment.

[qimissung]

In fact I can hear and see someone saying this in my mind's eye, and it IS better than just reading it.