It is not dark

[TheFifthElement]

*withdrawn*

[Pendragon]

I switch off the light but it is not dark.
The memory of light remains,
ghostlike, hovering over the bed.

The night turns grainy but it is not dark.

Something is bleeding
through the curtains: moonlight, streetlight,
car headlights. A policeman patrolling with a torch.
White light drips onto the sill, it soaks
into the curtains

but it is not dark.

Inside the room the clock
quietly flicks from one minute to the next.
Signalling: look at me, look at me!
Turning the numbers on a spool.

I turn it to the wall but it is not dark.

Brighter still is the light of the mind.
My eyes are a switch; they close and the mind clicks on.
Suddenly I am in a great room
with many lamps; each lamp powered by its own circuit.
Sharp light. The hum of electricity.
I circle the room turning them off one by one.

The room becomes dim but it is not dark.

So I dive down into the depths of my own blood.
Feel the dark heart beating me back into the womb,
into the silence before the womb. And still,

even here, it is not dark.Whoa! Whew! My gosh, what an epic piece of writing from Th' Element! Burning poetry! :thumbs_up

[Sweets America]

I love it even if I am not sure what it means. But the atmophere is really good, nicely depicted. The ending is very good too.

[dibyendra]

Fifth, you've written a very beautiful poem. I was completely engrossed to it while reading. I loved the imagery of this poem. Very good work!

[PrinceMyshkin]

Surely one of the most alive, one of the most immediate of your poems! Knowing a little as I do of your rigorously self critical nature. I doubt that you have allowed yourself as much satisfaction as you ought to have done from this flawlessly executed poem. That final verse, of descending into your own blood, is scary and brave!

I LOVE this Mme Fifth!!!

[symphony]

I can tell you had no effort at any kind of pretense, no looking back, while writing this one. It's the sort of poem that will flow, without making a fuss.

[TheFifthElement]

Thanks everyone :)

[Justin Rockwell]

Really good, I can actually feel the darkness and it puts my mind in a dark room, poem kinda makes me nervous lol. Good job.

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