Leaving Work the Day that Autumn Died

[Xillus_Xavier]

I'm wanting to know if this poem is too obscure.
Let me know your interpretation and overall impression of the poem please.

Leaving Work the Day that Autumn Died

Fallen oak leaves bathe on glass.
Beneath that silica shield I escape
icy rain from pall-bearing clouds
carrying old man Autumn away.
Radiated warmth - a vented breath -
welcomes my wet and shivering hands
to inner comforts of the car.
Shedding I am, a workweeks' wear,
yet home, and all its finish line glory,
still waits for me a metal marathon away.

[Dark Muse]

I do not think it is too obsecure, I thought it was well done with really good imagery. To me the poem is about modern convention putting a distance between man and nature, and the fact that it is so easy to just shut nature out in this day and age.

[qimissung]

I think Dark Muse understood the implications better than I, but I loved the imagery!

[Justin Rockwell]

I'm in Alabama too!!

I'm not catching on to any flaws, so I'd say it's not too obscure, good work.

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[Pendragon]

Great Imagery! I had this vision from the title of a girl named "Autumn" dying, perhaps for me the seasons are female since my only daughter is named Summer Dawn and if Ethan had been a girl we would have named Ethan "Autumn Angel".