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crux_soon
08-24-2008, 07:59 AM
The Heart's Cry



The wolves were howling,
At the moon that was shining.
Shining but with an eerie feeling,
Was anyone looking?

Complicated feelings,
All too confusing,
The sky darkening,
The wolves now whistling.

It's tempting,
seducing,
nonetheless terrifying,
Maybe I should stop thinking.

Sounds whistling,
Vision blurring,
Thoughts clogging,
I wish i never had this feeling.

After awakening,
everything was saddening,
the heart's crying,
the wolves whining,
the wind sadly singing.

Bells ringing,
Is this the ending?
I'm still handling,
the ending that is coming.

Is it too late?
Will i suffocate?
Have Faith,


I determine my fate.


The wolves are howling,
At the moon that is shining,
now without an eerie feeling,
Will this be a new beginning?


-MaxCrux

PrinceMyshkin
08-24-2008, 10:06 AM
The judicious repetition of certain images - of the howling wolves and of the moon - gave this a haunted quality. Well done!

crux_soon
08-24-2008, 11:24 AM
Thanks! xD