Take a man whose heart is filled

[PrinceMyshkin]

Take a man whose heart
is filled with envy, fear, suspicion and rage
and give him a rifle
but without ammunition
and he will club you to death
with the butt of that rifle.

Take the rifle away from him
and he will attempt to strangle you.

Bind up his hands
and he will try
to kick you to death
but

remove the envy, fear, suspicion and rage
from his heart
and he will weep inconsolably.

[lucidnightmares]

great job on this one:thumbs_up
i get a negative feel for humanity on this one, if wer`e not harming others where harming our selves i guess is what i`m getting at.

however after thinking just alittle longer i realized that an empty heart can allways be filled with something better.

in closing i guess i`d have to say that this is a very honest and cold poem, a great one at that too.

[goldenrod]

I think you have exposed the nub of what is essential in one of the human conditions!


goldenrod.

[ShadowFire]

I like this one. It is another take on saying that everything is perspective. Instead of trying to fix the situation and correct it, remove the cause of the trouble. Very nice. Thanks for sharing.

[PrinceMyshkin]

I think you have exposed the nub of what is essential in one of the human conditions!


goldenrod.

Thank you. You may have noted that I left out plain garden variety horniness, which did not quite fit the theme.

[jikan myshkin]

i love this. it is the truth. sometimes i envy the sloths. they don't need endless action to try to validate their existance.

[firefangled]

Great poem...ah! the very things with the deepest roots and ugliest flowers.



Perhaps another poem, another time...try a little horniness. :D

[PrinceMyshkin]

Great poem...ah! the very things with the deepest roots and ugliest flowers.



Perhaps another poem, another time...try a little horniness. :D

Alas, I do believe someone has beaten me to it...


oh she may be weary
them young girls they do get wearied
wearing that same old miniskirt dress
but when she gets weary
you try a little....

[Sweets America]

Why didn't I comment on this one earlier? Too busy arguing somehwere else? ;) I like the essence of what your poem say, I wish I could find the way someday, to inner rest.
I've been wondering about the validity of your last line though, as I'm not sure weeping would be the result. Or maybe the man would "retrospectively" be weeping, while he would be contemplating his past actions? Not sure.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Why didn't I comment on this one earlier? Too busy arguing somehwere else? ;) I like the essence of what your poem say, I wish I could find the way someday, to inner rest.
I've been wondering about the validity of your last line though, as I'm not sure weeping would be the result. Or maybe the man would "retrospectively" be weeping, while he would be contemplating his past actions? Not sure.

Well, it's only my guess - yours is likely to be as good or better, but my intuition was that all that rage and violence was the sublimation or perversion of some great grief that had never found an outlet.

[firefangled]

Originally Posted by firefangled
Great poem...ah! the very things with the deepest roots and ugliest flowers.

Perhaps another poem, another time...try a little horniness.


Alas, I do believe someone has beaten me to it...


oh she may be weary
them young girls they do get wearied
wearing that same old miniskirt dress
but when she gets weary
you try a little....


That would be the one I was thinking of...:)