What's the revolution

[Avalive]

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What's the revolution


I want to fight with real fighter
Break the walls to bury you in angry bricks
Twist your tongue by my sonnets
I pen the naked soul in vermilion ink
Crave for the seed of fire
Push the fame in the pool of flame
The torch of hope burns on the stone

The ceaseless battle for a new era
Break your drowsy quill
If nothing can be reinvented by your will
No Buddha's chant will save our duel
The death of poetry shall not be suicide
My raging loin fights with your rotten guts
Poetry is the 25th rib of the last Sage
Never cease to be alive in God's woo

[mono]

Wow! Your language use flows as sharp as a razor blade, keeping the reader's attention, along with the use of strong action verbs, and fast-changing imagery. I especially like the last two lines:

Poetry is the 25th rib of the last Sage
Never cease to be alive in God's woo.

Very impressive. I look forward to reading more of your work, if you post.

[Avalive]

Thank you,Mono

[amuse]

yes, great lines. i also like

I pen the naked soul in vermilion ink

[Bongitybongbong]

I hate being the only untalented poet. That's amazing how well you wrote especially,"Break the walls to bury you in angry bricks,Twist your tongue by my sonnets." Much better than any poem by me.

[Avalive]

Thank you all for reading it