He has gone...

[romantic novel]

Hi...this is the first time i post a poem of my own..I hope you will give me your opinion....


Darkness is everywhere..
I couldn't see..
I couldn't even try.

I scream all I could..
but no one hears.
I cry all I could..
but no one cares.

He has gone..
the one who hears.
He has gone ..
the one who cares.

He has gone..
He will never be here.

I still see him everywhere..
I still remember his eyes..
his smile..
and his laugh.

In this darkness
I couldn't see..
but Him.

He haunts me everywhere..
..in Darkness and light..
I couldn't forget him.

He is everywhere..
Everyman is he..
Every laugh is his.

He has gone..
and my heart has too..

I could live longer..
He was my life...and my life ended..


Is it possible that life will continue without him?
Is it possible that I could laugh and he is not there?

I dont Know!!!

But as long as I'm body without heart..
I will remember him...
I will love him...
I will pray for him..
Till I come to him..

[dibyendra]

Hi...this is the first time i post a poem of my own..I hope you will give me your opinion....


Darkness is everywhere..
I couldn't see..
I couldn't even try.

I scream all I could..
but no one hears.
I cry all I could..
but no one cares.

He has gone..
the one who hears.
He has gone ..
the one who cares.

He has gone..
He will never be here.

I still see him everywhere..
I still remember his eyes..
his smile..
and his laugh.

In this darkness
I couldn't see..
but Him.

He haunts me everywhere..
..in Darkness and light..
I couldn't forget him.

He is everywhere..
Everyman is he..
Every laugh is his.

He has gone..
and my heart has too..

I could live longer..
He was my life...and my life ended..


Is it possible that life will continue without him?
Is it possible that I could laugh and he is not there?

I dont Know!!!

But as long as I'm body without heart..
I will remember him...
I will love him...
I will pray for him..
Till I come to him..

This poem recalls the past and is very haunting as well. It's a heartfelt poem and is spontaneous. I loved it. Very touching as well.

[blazeofglory]

Poetry is something, a piece of beauty, and since it springs from the heart, no matter whether or not you adhere to a set of theories or stylistic ideas it still really works.

[romantic novel]

dibyendra...

thank you so much for your words..

and thank you for your passing...

[romantic novel]

blazeofglory..

thank you for your comment..

i think you are right...as long as the words from the heart..it is poetry...

it doesnt matter the theories..

thank you again..

[MorpheusSandman]

Wonderful! This actually painfully recalls a dark period in my life as well, and I think you really captured that here.

[goldenrod]

You have the gift, so don't worry!

I once was told that because the reader had found no cohesive pattern in the things that I wrote about, nor in the manner in which I wrote them, that I was not worthy of being critiqued...lucky for me I did not slash a wrist, but decided to drink some cocoa instead!:)

goldenrod.

[romantic novel]

Thanks MorpheusSandman..

I'm really happy you like my poem..

I wish we never encounter this experience again!!

Once is really enough to break our hearts..

[romantic novel]

Thanks Goldenrod for your words...and











I will drink cola as well :)

Thanks again,,

[V.Jayalakshmi]

Dear Romantic Novel,

The poem is well written.Since you have asked for comments,I feel I can say the following.

1)Instead of 'Has' use of 'is' would have been better."He Is Gone" as it expresses the inevitability of the loss.

2) Is it possible that I could laugh and he is not there?

Here is the future guilt coming up.Can we still continue when the one we loved is gone?I feel with you Dear,here.

3)I feel the sorrow too and you succeed because as a writer that is what counts best.

Thank you.

[romantic novel]

Dear Romantic Novel,

The poem is well written.Since you have asked for comments,I feel I can say the following.

1)Instead of 'Has' use of 'is' would have been better."He Is Gone" as it expresses the inevitability of the loss.

2) Is it possible that I could laugh and he is not there?

Here is the future guilt coming up.Can we still continue when the one we loved is gone?I feel with you Dear,here.

3)I feel the sorrow too and you succeed because as a writer that is what counts best.

Thank you.


Thank you so so so much for your comment..that is what i really need..

I'm happay you live my words and felt what i feel..

I really appreciate your words..thank you again