My Heart is a Rose

[Dark Muse]

My Heart is a Rose

Like a rose
well tended
memories of you
continue to grow

My thoughts
dominated
by a love that
unravels

In soft
velveteen petals
your touch
makes me quiver
as leaves of the
aspen in a breeze

My heart you
have captured
like seeds incased
in their shells
growing fertile
and waiting for fires
heat to allow release

My love a blossom
I open before you
made yours forever.

[qimissung]

You extend the metaphor all the way through-well done. I like the 'soft velveteen petals,' and the fifth stanza in particular.

[Lioness_Heart]

The floral imagery you use is really effective; it flows beautifully, and is touching while being understated. The velveteen petals stanza in particular creates a really sensuous atmosphere.

It's wonderful (in my humble opinion :))

[Dark Muse]

Thank you both very much

[blazeofglory]

I am deeply moved

[Dark Muse]

Thank you very much

[goldenrod]

Have been browsing this evening. It is stops, like yours, which make the pleasure of doing so, a delight!

goldenrod.

[Dark Muse]

Why thank you very much, I am honored

[firefangled]

You honor the beauty of the rose with this poem.

[ShadowFire]

So there i am looking at the first page and your title jumps out. I love the title but then you turn it into an amazing poem. As many have said i also like the "velveteen petals" very nice. Thank you so much for sharing this

[Dark Muse]

Thank you

[phoebelll25]

why is heart a rose but not some other flower?

[Dark Muse]

Becasue rose is just what I felt like using when I wrote this

[dibyendra]

Tender and exquisite poem, Dark Muse!

I particularly loved the following lines:


In soft
velveteen petals
your touch
makes me quiver
as leaves of the
aspen in a breeze

:thumbs_up

[Pendragon]

I think your last stanza clinches the poem very nicely, a lovely poem! :thumbs_up :)

[blazeofglory]

My Heart is a Rose


My love a blossom
I open before you
made yours forever.

Really? It is interesting to read it

[NikolaiI]

He he he. . I love how blaze's comment just pulls the thread to a stop. You were already here! :)

"If the Sun and Moon should ever doubt,
They'd immediately go out." -_William Blake.