Tarnish

[ctalerico]

Like gold turns poor to rich
Was my life with you
Enriched.

Like pewter's malleable gray fade
Were all the promises
You made.

Like iron's hardened strength
Was your mettle when
You went.

Like brass turned sully green
Is my defiled love
Unseen.

Like silver turned to black
Is the meaningfulness
I lack.

Like copper turned to rust
Is the corroded residue
Of us.

November 1992

From Other Songs, Just Sadder
Copyright © 1992 Carl Talerico
All rights reserved.

[Dark Muse]

Very nicely written, I love the comparions you made with the metal, I thought that worked wonderfully well, and was very creativie.

[PrinceMyshkin]

I agree. Brilliant use of these metaphors.

[blazeofglory]

Matchless, superb.

[goldenrod]

A satisfying read...I can now go to my bed and sleep the sleep of the, hopefully, non-insomniac...

goldenrod.

[ctalerico]

Thanks Blaze, Prince and Dark Muse for your kind words. I feel such keen reward when others derive enjoyment from my work and take time to express their pleasure!

[ctalerico]

A satisfying read...I can now go to my bed and sleep the sleep of the, hopefully, non-insomniac...

goldenrod.

Good night, good night! Parting is such sweet sorrow, That I shall say good night 'til it be morrow.

[qimissung]

Well said, well-written, the images so beautifully strong!

[ctalerico]

Well said, well-written, the images so beautifully strong!

Thank you Gimissung. I'm happy you enjoyed it and I appreciate your letting me know.

[goldenrod]

After reading your clever, and entrancing poem, I believe the author is suffering from an acute case of "verdi-grief!" :(:)

goldenrod.

[ctalerico]

After reading your clever, and entrancing poem, I believe the author is suffering from an acute case of "verdi-grief!" :(:)

goldenrod.

Good grief, nothing "cute" about that! Glad you liked the poem.