Mundanity

[qimissung]

A note resounds,
The earth moves.
A mountain, grain by grain,
Succumbs to unearthly power,
Until the whole, unmoored,
Completes its’ dance of death,
And Phoebus, in vain, cannot with searching eye,
See to find his way.

A note resounds,
A child sits, immobile.
The volcanic sun moves
Moment by moment,
Phoebus striding across his realm.
Below, a bead of sweat gathers
Momentum, coursing through the
gray dust as a sled through snow.
An eyelid flicks, a fly settles.

A note resounds.
Unliving beauty,
Fashioned to serve a greater power,
Guards the unknowable.
Cacophony rises.
The sentient being, possessed of
A grain of sand,
Stands on the razors’ edge-
And sings


qimissung
July 22, 2008

[qimissung]

I love my poem! Don't we all? The name means mundane-I looked up the form to see if the suffix -ity was appropriate, and it seems to be, so basically the title is saying that what is happening in the poem is mundane. Is it? You decide.

[goldenrod]

Maybe yes maybe no! This sitting on a fence can lead to that dread condition, "numbumitis(I looked up the ending and it appears to be appropriate!)


goldenrod.

[firefangled]

I say no to mundane.

What I did get was a sense of the moment just after a state of suspension has been ended by action.

Because of the last line, I was reminded of the last stanza of Stevens's Of Mere Being (Forgive me for the inability to display this without a plug. It has nothing to do with my intentions :) ):

The palm stands on the edge of space.
The wind moves slowly in the branches.
The bird's fire-fangled feathers dangle down.

[qimissung]

o-o-o-h, whatever it is, I don't want to get numbumitis! Is it contagious? And don't you love the flexibility of the English language-like a lovely Chinese acrobat it is!

Interesting connection, firefangled-I always wondered where you got your name-I thought you made it up yourself. I haven't read much Steven's, just that one about the jar, which I hate. I'll have to look up that poem. It sounds like thematically ours are similar-his will just have to go on being famous without me! :)

[blazeofglory]

Seems the real account of how creation, the creation of the universe or the earth goes.