My Best friend Joey

[aBIGsheep]

Hey! This is a morbid poem that I wrote. Any critiques are always appreciated. I hope you guys enjoy it!
EDIT: Awww snap. I think I put this in the wrong forum. Could someone move this for me?

I have a best friend. His name is Joey.
He follows me wherever I go.
Right down into the Bowels.

I have a best friend. His name is Joey.
I like his smile.
It stretches from ear to ear.
And then some.

I have a best friend. His name is Joey.
He makes my mother cry.
So we made her stop crying.
The heads somewhere in the back yard.

I have a best friend. His name is Joey.
He has a lot of friends.
Would you like to see my best friend?
Just look under your bed.

[PrinceMyshkin]

"Morbid" is right - but also intriguing and provocative!

[lucidnightmares]

awesome, love it, this is definitely gonna be in my head all day

[aBIGsheep]

Awesome! If it creeped you out then I'd call it a success.

The only thing that really bothered me about this poem is that its not really much of a poem at all. Its not rhythmic and when I showed it to one of my friends, they had to explain what a stanza was. I don't know much about poems at all really D:

If anyone could help me make it flow a little bit better I'd appreciate it very much.

[Pendragon]

Eek! Wonderful way of being creepy, I call it! :thumbs_up

[goldenrod]

I would much prefer looking under your bed! Does your friend Joey come cheap if I want a "hit" carried out?

Welcome to this place "BIG".

On april 16, 1921 at Kondura station N.S.W. Australia, Joey Hendricks denuded 21 sheep of their wool in 32 minutes...it was a case of "shear madness!"


goldenrod.

[ShadowFire]

What a fact goldenrod...I have to agree with all the rest, I liked the poem, aBIGsheep. I have to say my favorite line is the mother's head in the backyard. Yeah I know creepy. Thanks for sharing.

[aBIGsheep]

Thanks for all the praise guys! I think I'm going to add some more too it later so you guys better stay tuned. :D