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goldenrod
07-18-2008, 09:45 PM
gazpacho for one...


She peels a red onion
layer by layer,
weeps for love
of her betrayer.

Absent minded
cuts tomatoes through,
to blend into
a bitter-cold stew.

Tear drops, mixed in
with a wooden spoon.
For a love, once hot,
grown cold...too soon!


goldenrod.

goldenrod
07-18-2008, 11:37 PM
LOOP...



Damn!...it's starting again...

And, once more
I pull it apart.
She said this,
I said that.
It all began
from nothing,
then, escalated,
got real bad, stopped
when two doors slammed.
It's been running
around my mind
again and again,
making me agitated.
Feel a little sick,
nauseous like,
but, I've simmered down,
well, almost.

Damn!...it's starting again...


goldenrod.

qimissung
07-19-2008, 12:18 AM
I will never look at gazpacho the same way again. Shakespeare said the play's the thing, but I say the metaphor's the thing-and I like this one. Your second poem-clever!

ampoule
07-19-2008, 08:34 AM
gazpacho for one...


She peels a red onion
layer by layer,
weeps for love
of her betrayer.

Absent minded
cuts tomatoes through,
to blend into
a bitter-cold stew.

Tear drops, mixed in
with a wooden spoon.
For a love, once hot,
grown cold...too soon!


goldenrod.

I love all the flavors of this even if I have tasted it a few times.

dibyendra
07-19-2008, 10:04 AM
gazpacho for one...


She peels a red onion
layer by layer,
weeps for love
of her betrayer.

Absent minded
cuts tomatoes through,
to blend into
a bitter-cold stew.

Tear drops, mixed in
with a wooden spoon.
For a love, once hot,
grown cold...too soon!


goldenrod.

Wow, I loved this one! It's quite different poem having vivid metaphors in it. :thumbs_up

firefangled
07-19-2008, 10:47 AM
Priceless as good gazpacho!

And with Loop, yes...been there, done that and you nailed it.

goldenrod
07-30-2008, 10:05 PM
(qimissung)

A good metaphor can light up a poem like the in-streaking meteor burns brightly through the sky, and exhibits about the same degree of rarity! So thank you a million!

goldenrod.

goldenrod
07-30-2008, 10:07 PM
(ampoule)

Ah! the taste!


goldenrod.

goldenrod
07-30-2008, 10:11 PM
(dibyendra)

This one came to me in a brief, free flow.It's what makes, making up poetry FUN!:)


goldenrod.

goldenrod
07-30-2008, 10:14 PM
(firefangled)

Thanks "fire"...doing a little light tippling and browsing the forum...

goldenrod.