"as one"

[goldenrod]

as one


Two sat in silence,
with much being said.
Using soft sighs, low murmurs,
slight movement of heads.

A language encoded,
but well recognised.
From repeated experience,
by four loving eyes.

Conversation so subtle,
complete, nuance rich.
Flowing gently forward,
at an inaudible pitch.

Two enraptured familiars,
in their own little world.
No need a translation,
of one, unspoken word!

Full pregnant the evening,
with all, having been said.
Then, on an unseen mute signal,
as one...off to bed!


goldenrod.

[Dark Muse]

This was beautiful, and very tender. I just loved the mood this poem set.

[Albatross of Hu]

My favorite piece:

Conversation so subtle,
complete, nuance rich.
Flowing gently forward,
at an inaudible pitch.

Well done Goldenrod!

[PrinceMyshkin]

Love the feeling, HATE the mandatory rhymes! You know AuntShecky's signature quotation from Frost? Well, writing poetry WITH strict rhyme and meter is like playing tennis with the net wrapped around your arms.

[goldenrod]

"not guilty, m'lud!"


There are friends who
sometimes say to me.
"If it don't rhyme, it ain't poetry!"
My quick retort.
"Don't look at me!"

While, surreptitiously, covering up,
what they hate to see!

goldenrod.

[firefangled]

I absolutely love your subjects and I think the rhyme may take us away from the emotional content. I knew I would love it for that from the first stanza.

Reminds me of Paul Simon's Old Friends I remember most the lines

Can you imagine us years from today,
Sharing a park bench quietly.
How suddenly strange to be seventy.

[goldenrod]

(Dark Muse)

It was one of those that came together almost of its own free will...being lazy, love those self generating poems!;)


goldenrod.

[goldenrod]

(Albatross of Hu)

Thank you, Hu!

I hope you don't hate replies that rhyme!:)

goldenrod.

[goldenrod]

(PrinceMyshkin)

I feel that there are some poems which just cry out for rhyme! And, being the soft that I am, I can't stand verses in such obvious distress, giving into them, far to often, than what is good for them!!!;)

goldenrod.

[goldenrod]

(firefangled)

Had fun with this one, flowed so easy and almost, but not qite, as if my hands were o=in automatic drive!

goldenrod.