Love, hope, bitterness & death

[PrinceMyshkin]

A solitary bird seems to let go
of the weight of being and rise
effortlessly upwards

but seen from another angle the bird
is motionless, forever stationary,
arrested in time and space

and it is the earth
that has come unstuck from it
and is falling, falling

falling forever away.

[symphony]

Strike 2!

Is that what happens once u mention Rilke to me? (For this reminded me of:
The Leaves are Falling, falling as from far,
as though above were withering farthest gardens;
they fall with a denying attitude.

And night after night, down into solitude,
the heavy earth falls far from every star.

We are all falling. This hand's falling too --
all have this falling-sickness none withstands.

And yet there's One whose gently holding hands
this universal falling can't fall through.

That's Leishman's version of Rilke's Autumn. )

Anyway, u once said u had an interest in physics too, and then u drifted off to literature. I guess that's long lost love rebounding, aye? :p

[Sweets America]

This poem is wonderful, Shou, as I told you this morning. I wish I could write witty things like this! You're one great writer!

[CdnReader]

A solitary bird seems to let go
of the weight of being and rise
effortlessly upwards

but seen from another angle the bird
is motionless, forever stationary,
arrested in time and space

and it is the earth
that has come unstuck from it
and is falling, falling

falling forever away.


Oh, this is wonderful, Jer. I love it! May I borrow it for my blog?

In L2, should it be "rises"?

[Sweets America]

Oh, this is wonderful, Jer. I love it! May I borrow it for my blog?

In L2, should it be "rises"?

I think it could be "rises" but also "rise" if you understand "seems to rise" and I think that's what Jer intended to say?

I agree so much about this poem being wonderful, I am so amazed at Jer's talent!!

[PrinceMyshkin]

Oh, this is wonderful, Jer. I love it! May I borrow it for my blog?

In L2, should it be "rises"?

just as well you put that last bit in small letters so as not to embarrass yourself TOO much because your remark indicates a TOTAL misunderstanding of the poem! Just kidding, but Mlle Sweets is right (as usual) about the grammatic option but "seems to rise" was my intention and I wish to stick with it.

Yes, you may quote it so long as you do NOT attribute it to Chas. Bukowski!

[CdnReader]

just as well you put that last bit in small letters so as not to embarrass yourself TOO much because your remark indicates a TOTAL misunderstanding of the poem! Just kidding, but Mlle Sweets is right (as usual) about the grammatic option but "seems to rise" was my intention and I wish to stick with it.

I had a feeling that I had the grammar wrong, which was why I thought I'd better whisper. ;) Thanks for setting me straight! :D


Yes, you may quote it so long as you do NOT attribute it to Chas. Bukowski!

Tee-hee. Will do. :)

[PrinceMyshkin]

A solitary bird seems to let go
of the weight of being and rise
effortlessly upwards

but seen from another angle the bird
is motionless, forever stationary,
arrested in time and space

and it is the earth
that has come unstuck from it
and is falling, falling

falling forever away.


Bumping this up in the hope that one or two of you who missed it might appreciate it.

[Sweets America]

Bumping this up in the hope that one or two of you who missed it might appreciate it.

Sucky!!! ;)

[goldenrod]

Didn't miss it, but, at times I have difficulty in locking onto a page, one of the faults of a "webtv" Thought I'd have another try and...presto! Heeere's goldenrod!:)

Expressive poem, from all points of view...


goldenrod.

[bacchante]

a piece of philosophy in music.

[Umbilical]

I appreciate it,
for the ability to see life as the other perspective,
not FROM another perspective as the same perspective.
Is this how you feel love is?
Is this why it's so painful for a body to leave us once we've found our pleasure --
to not stay in it forever?

Jer, you'd be happy to know that I'm going out to a club friday, and the DJ is introducing me to some people he knows... I'm getting into the 'scene'... becoming more social. You encouraged me to do this. Thank you. Hope you are well...?

:)

[tattooed wonder]

the last stanza is very lovely... I really enjoyed this poem

[PrinceMyshkin]

the last stanza is very lovely... I really enjoyed this poem

Thank you. It is special to me because I woke up with the title in mind, which I understood came from the feeling that I'd been f*cked over by a woman I liked, and I could feel the hazy outline of the bitter, accusing, vindictive poem that would follow from that title, but something caught me in time and persuaded me that I'd be happier if I could write a poem that transcended my ego and the anger I felt born of self-pity.

[blazeofglory]

A solitary bird seems to let go
of the weight of being and rise
effortlessly upwards

but seen from another angle the bird
is motionless, forever stationary,
arrested in time and space

and it is the earth
that has come unstuck from it
and is falling, falling

falling forever away.


I am wordless. I too write poems, yet the height of yours is coveted. It needs a very great thought and imaginative faculty.

[kiz_paws]

A solitary bird seems to let go
of the weight of being and rise
effortlessly upwards

but seen from another angle the bird
is motionless, forever stationary,
arrested in time and space

and it is the earth
that has come unstuck from it
and is falling, falling

falling forever away.
This poem struck me as a very delicate piece of work, and I felt the falling, falling. I loved the way it was woven from start to finish; beautiful. :thumbs_up

[PrinceMyshkin]

This poem struck me as a very delicate piece of work, and I felt the falling, falling. I loved the way it was woven from start to finish; beautiful. :thumbs_up

Thank you. Did you see my explanation somewhere before this of how it could have gone some other way, could have been yet another How could you! Poor me! Wah-wah! but, whatever its merits, I was so happy to follow it in another direction.