Lost In You (sappy i know, but please respond)

[wagravity]

My eyes are restless tonight
Your voice keeps running through my head
This distance is our suicide
Imagining when we'll be close again

You're losing sleep in spite of me
Don't tell me what you're wishing for
Falling into a dark tranquility
Your slumber lasts forever more

My mouth won't ignore you this time
I lost every word rehearsed to say
Oblivious to all the tell tale signs
We'll ruin friendships on the way

I'll protect you from the movie
I'll catch a million lightning bugs
We'll have a sparkler party
It won't burn cause we'll be wearing gloves

I'll turn on every single light
Hold you close to feel your heartbeat
I'll stay awake through the night
Just so I can watch you sleep

[Pendragon]

Not bad! It might be better if you toss the fourth stanza, it doesn't really fit with the rest... ;) :)

[goldenrod]

Tend to agree with Pendragon on the 4th...although I certainly will take the 5th:)

Your poem at leasts shows there is a chance for (in your opinion) sappy points of view concerning love. Me, I like sap, particularly maple syrup!mmmmmm...

goldenrod.;) :) ;)

[wagravity]

thanks for the replies, and i agree with the both of you, that stanza doesn't fit but it's an inside personalized thing that no one else would get.