"string theory"

[goldenrod]

string theory.

Hang me out to dry
on a ten dimensional
piece of string...
and let us see
what transpires.

Does the string vibrate
with the agony,
of my disappearing
reality?

Or, perhaps,
a new whole is discovered,
with the Gravity
of the situation!

Why not five new paradigms?
To add to the infinity
of the small...

Inside of me!

goldenrod.

[PrinceMyshkin]

As I understand it, there are currently 16 varieties of String Theory, to which I propose these additions:

17) The ratio of the weight a piece of string will support, to its length.

18) The relative factors of a Stringer's ability to string-along a stringee vs the stringee's willingness to be strung along.

[Umbilical]

I enjoy point 18.

I'm willing...
I'm stringing myself along,

so I suppose this string-theory is inner-conflict? Lol.

[goldenrod]

(PrinceMyshkin)

Aw...you're just trying to string me along!:(

goldenrod.

[goldenrod]

(Umbilical)

In a way...dangerous energy left after the "big bang", wandering the cosmos.

goldenrod.

[jgweed]

Darn! I thought the poem was either about how to make cheese or about playful kittens.
Nice poem, now that I read it.

[Lioness_Heart]

Hee hee, I love this poem.Goldenrod, you managed to write a science-esque poem without sounding pontificating (as I always seem to do). It's really neat and slick... and just seems to bubble along quite nicely.

[Quark]

I don't comment on LitNet poems much, but I thought I should mention that I enjoyed this one. I like how you made a nerdy concept like string theory into something poetic. My only suggestion might be that there should be some punctuation to indicate to the reader how the poem should be read. I don't think you mean for us to blow through it quickly. It seems like the dramatic effect of the poem requires pauses. The first few stanza particularly could use some sort of punctuation at the end to indicate to the reader a break in thought. Maybe the absence of commas and periods is your thing, but I think it could help the reader if there was something there.

[goldenrod]

(jgweed)

Sorry to disappoint! Seeing as how I like cheese and kittens!:)

goldenrod.

[goldenrod]

(Lioness_Heart)

The secret might reside in the liberal partaking of diet Coke before making the attempt!:)


goldenrod.

[goldenrod]

(Quark)


Punctuation added. It was fun, just like throwing darts at a bulls-eye!

It was done intentionally. I, sometimes, get the urge to flow a poem in my head, then wonder if others will adopt the same cadence. Should know better by now.

goldenrod.