"the green eyed monster."

[goldenrod]

Ah! hazel eyed deceiver,
cold comfort in my bed,
your lack of passion chills me,
and fills my heart with dread!

Have you been truly faithful,
does my wedding band corrode?
Is your ardor for another?
This green-eyed monster...

Thinks he knows!
******************

P.S. It's much more difficult these days,
what with the green eyed monster,
wearing colored contact lenses!:(

goldenrod.

[jikan myshkin]

i really like it. the cold comfort and wedding band corroding are very stark imagery

[Captain_Kuchiki]

I don't think I fully understand this poem, but it is pretty interesting and has good wording. :cool:

[goldenrod]

(jikan myshkin)

This one came about from my reading of so much love agony on this forum!:)

goldenrod.

[goldenrod]

(Captain_Kuchiki)

I don't think I fully understand it myself!:(


goldenrod.

[Tarquin]

' Your lack of passion chills me
and fills my heart with dread!'

these are my favorite lines. It makes me feel like something bad is going to happen and there is nothing i can do to stop it.

[Anza]

MY favorite of your works. Thanks for a good poem, Goldenrod. It has awesome meter, and a good rhyme scheme. 10/10

[goldenrod]

(Tarquin)

You picked up on the exact atmosphere I wished to creat!

Sometimes the small poems are the hardest to get just right...still don't know if I truly succeeded with this one?

goldenrod.

[goldenrod]

(Anza)

Your liking of this small offering chuffs me no-end!

goldenrod.