Unaccustomed Satire

[The1TheOnlyJP]

Stone
Rough, heartless
Silent, still, aging
Humbled by nature's furor
Myself

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I concur. Detailed. Details that coincide are on the same line. [You'd be surprised how often someone has "lonely and excited" on one line, and "solemn and happy" on another. Sometimes this is good, but it obviously does not work w/ all poetry.]

"Humbled by nature's furuor."
Excellent imagery.

The last line [not fitting the syllable pattern for obvious clincher effects] ties nicely to make your point.

Have you ever read Tale of Two Cities? There is a Marquis Saint Everemonde in this book that is constantly described as being made of stone, as if a Gorgon has looked upon him. The author even goes so far as to describe the Marquis' nose, which has a small dint on each side, which flares slightly whenever he is angry.

This poem reminded me of him.

Nice work.