a thought

[Tarquin]

in here i was sitting
it was here that i thought
how we all are
in everyday talk
From someones mouth,
we may hear our name,
weather they use it to speak
or if it's another way
cruel words come out with their thoughts
and i have nothing to say
What i would like to do is explian
but what good would that do?
so i let them speak about me
like im not in the room
I would like to pity them, for not even thinking
but in that i might be wrong
Maybe what they say could be a little bit true
maybe, i don't know, im not you
when i look in a mirror i can just walk away
but with everyday people
you can't walk out of veiw
Everyone everywhere is in everyday thought
they talk about it in everyday talk
but i hold it in, i make them wait
The things they say about me
weather true or not
i could extract my revenge
i could make them pay
but would that make me, lower then they?
so i just sit here and think my thoughts...

[PrinceMyshkin]

Wonderful use of the stream-of-consciousness technique, and without ever forcing your language or deviating from standard colloquial diction, you achieve poetry!

[Tarquin]

thank you so much!! :) I wasn't too sure on it, but after reading your post im happy that i did. thanks again!

.Quinn.

[Tournesol]

Tarquin, I really, really love the ease with which you write!

Prince is right, your language doesn't seem 'forced'.
It's neat. It does its job. Not more, nor less. Just enough, just right.

I like the free-verse style of poetry. Do you often write like this, or do your poems usually rhyme?

[Tarquin]

Thanks so much Tournesol! when i write i just pick up a pen and it just comes out theres normally not alot of rhyming, just whatevers on my mind at the time.

[Anatoliy]

i'm not a native speaker of english, but i like this poem. i can't judge about language that much, but for me (not native speaker) it sounds really not bad. but most of all i like the idea (and it doesn't matter, that it's a little bit banal).

[Pendragon]

Nice flow! Great poem! :thumbs_up

[blazeofglory]

We are in a net of thoughts. Do not mind if they manufacture ideas. It is human nature that we can not think beyond a point.

Let others think the way they want and chat until they trespass your freedom.

[goldenrod]

Read it straight through as the flow would suggest, then read it, piece by piece. The sum seems to be greater than the parts...nice!:)

goldenrod.

[Tarquin]

Pendragon, blazeofglory, goldenrod, thank you so much for your words, thoughts, and comments, i really aprechiate it. :)

.Quinn.