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ampoule
05-28-2008, 09:08 AM
The Viewing

The midnight message said, "One man has viewed you."
I pull my robe close to me, looking from side to side,
Could he still be here, watching me in my morning glory?
I glance toward the bookcase, the sunlight on the ceiling.

Did he tiptoe past my bed, the night's wee hours, the sheet
Like a river flowing over my shoulder, spilling down
Between my arms, my legs, did he linger at my ankle, perhaps
Quietly lifting the careless shroud to see my heart beating?

Did he lean closer to hear my steady breathing, touching
The molten tendrils spread upon my pillow, his breath catching
As I turned my face with a moan into my white shoulder,
Shifting, a naked, quiet quake, trembling before him?

Was it a dream, that manly breath I felt upon my cheek,
That had I pursed my lips would they have met his, surprised,
And he would have run from my room not to be caught, viewing?

ampoule, May TwentyEighth, TwoThousandEight

Pendragon
05-28-2008, 09:15 AM
"The molten tendrils spread upon my pillow" Wow! What imagery! Beautiful poem, Lady Amp! :thumbs_up

CdnReader
05-28-2008, 09:25 AM
Fabulous, Amp! I love it! :)

amanda_isabel
05-28-2008, 05:48 PM
This is lovely, ampoule.

I find "Could he still be here, watching me in my morning glory?" quite amusing, since I'm not particularly attractive right out of bed, but that's just me. :)

I loved the suggestive use of the ankle in
"did he linger at my ankle, perhaps
Quietly lifting the careless shroud to see my heart beating?".

and I loved the whole thing, word for word... :D

ampoule
05-28-2008, 08:51 PM
Wow! Thank you Pen, Cdn and Amanda. I'm glad you caught the humor of the first stanza, Amanda. Trust me, I am being facetious. A morning glory I am not! ;)

PrinceMyshkin
05-28-2008, 08:52 PM
Where's my fan when I need it?

Smoogles
05-28-2008, 11:55 PM
Wow, very impressive use of imagery here. I like your style very much so.

firefangled
05-29-2008, 02:24 AM
The Viewing

The midnight message said, "One man has viewed you."
I pull my robe close to me, looking from side to side,
Could he still be here, watching me in my morning glory?
I glance toward the bookcase, the sunlight on the ceiling.

Did he tiptoe past my bed, the night's wee hours, the sheet
Like a river flowing over my shoulder, spilling down
Between my arms, my legs, did he linger at my ankle, perhaps
Quietly lifting the careless shroud to see my heart beating?

Did he lean closer to hear my steady breathing, touching
The molten tendrils spread upon my pillow, his breath catching
As I turned my face with a moan into my white shoulder,
Shifting, a naked, quiet quake, trembling before him?

Was it a dream, that manly breath I felt upon my cheek,
That had I pursed my lips would they have met his, surprised,
And he would have run from my room not to be caught, viewing?

ampoule, May TwentyEighth, TwoThousandEight

I can only echo what has already been said. I loved the lines and their endings, they set a good pace for the poem. Was this a dream?

Bravo!

PrinceMyshkin
05-29-2008, 06:54 AM
I can only echo what has already been said. I loved the lines and their endings, they set a good pace for the poem. Was this a dream?

Bravo!

My guess rather is that it's a play on the sort of information one gets on one of those sites where one is informed when someone has "viewed" one's profile.

ampoule
05-29-2008, 07:13 AM
Here ya go Prince.

http://www.ideco.com/fans/images/EH0291g.JPG


Thank you smoogles.

Fire...it was a daydream.

Prince, you're such a smarty pants. ;)