hearts carved into trees

[amuse]

don't want you to be
there
don't want you
to see
me peeking around from
behind some tree

if i listen in when
someone's laughing
that's my business not yours

'cause you made me cry.

stay away from my funeral
stay away from my life
they're one and the same
it's all love and strife.

don't want you to be there
don't want you to see
if i ever get over you
when i finally am free



*yeah it rhymes :blush: :blush:*

[amuse]

crap, how did i double post??? sorry.

[Jay]

Don't worry, Jes managed to double post as well, I think it might be the site having some kind of a hiccup... anyway
The rhyming didn't 'hurt' the poem in any way... ok, I admit, I don't hate rhyming.
As much as I like your poems I prefer you happy :(. Don't let him hurt you like that.
*so this is my 2000th post? cool :)*

[jessw]

amuse i like that poem

[mono]

Your word usage seems as sharply accurate as a razor blade. Impressive, as usual, amuse, and surprising to notice a rhyme.

[amuse]

happy 21st century, Jay!
thank you, jessw.
um, mono...i sort of e-mailed a very abridged version of this to my ex; that was the impetus for the poem (sort of why it's so on target).