a little jot last night...

[Beautifull]

so it isn't perfected yet,but i couldn't sleep last night until i wrote it down,it stuck to me...:p

Pitter Patter,Pitter Patter,
softly against my window,
while i lay my head to rest,
Pitter Patter.

Splish Splash,Splish Splash.
lightly against the patio side,
even while my pen descends to paper,
Splish Splash.

Drim Drum,Drim Drum,
loudly against my roof,
just as i cozy up on my couch,
Drim Drum.

Drip Drop, Drip Drop,
falling from the sky,
each drop,making a soft melody,
soothing my soul,
Drip drop.

Pitter Patter,
Splish Splash,
Drim Drum,
Drip Drop,
coming together,
to make a melody so sweet,
it soothes all the pain.

[blazeofglory]

Is the poem dedicated to children? Or just written for them. It is likened to a nursery rhyme. It has a beauty, something that soothes or appeals to kids. Beautifully written but is more suitable on the children forum.

Do not be discouraged and it demands great skills to write such poems, losing oneself to a world of children, in a dreamy world far from everyday realities.

[Beautifull]

like i said, it was just a jot down.
it was how i felt at the spur of the moment.

thank you for the complement though.

[blazeofglory]

like i said, it was just a jot down.
it was how i felt at the spur of the moment.

thank you for the complement though.

But they are different than the usual one and for that matter enthralling.

[Beautifull]

But they are different than the usual one and for that matter enthralling.

but you still think it's for the children's website?

[Tournesol]

Hi Beautifull!!

I really like your poem...and I love rainfall, so reading it made me pleased!

I would have to agree with blazeofglory, the poem has a certain childlike innocence to it, yet at the same time, it is very, very poetic...eg "each drop, making a soft melody, soothing my soul"...I love that line!

So, I think that it'd be a great way to introduce children to poetry!

[just as an aside - in one of my poems, I once referred to raindrops as 'window-water-diamonds'. I was inspired to name it thus as I waited at a traffic light. The rain had stopped, and the sun came out. The raindrops made these gorgeous shadows on the dashboard and my hands! I've been in love with raindrops ever since, I have the highest regard for them!]

[Beautifull]

wow!

yeah, i didn't start loving the rain until i went to a place where the rain didn't come so often and when it did...i loved it...the sound it made...the way it felt when i ran in it...and it was the luckiest of nights when i fell asleep just listening to it.and in reality, it does soothe a soul that needs it.

the rain is my favorite part...of anything really...and i'm glad someone else agrees with me!:D

oh! and thank you for the comment!:)

[qimissung]

A very good use of onomatopoeia ( I'm not entirely sure I spelled that right). This is a lovely poem. I'm sure children would like it, but it doesn't have to be limited to them.

[Beautifull]

hmm.but nothing in poetry world is limited, everyone reads it, so i don't think i will post this on the children's.i'll leave it here...thank you...

[Beautifull]

Another jot in the spur of the moment.

I
a one letter word
But is used to describe each unto their own
but every once in a while,
it is used in authority.

I over we
I over plain little me
I over you.

though it is so self-centered,
I is used to describe more than that.

I can help you
I appreciate you
I love you...

[Maximilianus]

I very much enjoyed both of your jot-downs, beauti. Very well done! ;)

[The Walker]

so it isn't perfected yet,but i couldn't sleep last night until i wrote it down,it stuck to me...:p

Pitter Patter,Pitter Patter,
softly against my window,
while i lay my head to rest,
Pitter Patter.

Splish Splash,Splish Splash.
lightly against the patio side,
even while my pen descends to paper,
Splish Splash.

Drim Drum,Drim Drum,
loudly against my roof,
just as i cozy up on my couch,
Drim Drum.

Drip Drop, Drip Drop,
falling from the sky,
each drop,making a soft melody,
soothing my soul,
Drip drop.

Pitter Patter,
Splish Splash,
Drim Drum,
Drip Drop,
coming together,
to make a melody so sweet,
it soothes all the pain.


i liked very much this one! made me float for a little while :D

[Beautifull]

thank you very much!
i'm glad you found a little floaty time while reading one of my poems, Walker!:D

[Beautifull]

I very much enjoyed both of your jot-downs, beauti. Very well done! ;)

do you really think so? thank you!
i was beginning to think that the first one wasn't so good...:sick:
but you made me feel better.:lol:

[Maximilianus]

do you really think so? thank you!
i was beginning to think that the first one wasn't so good...:sick:
but you made me feel better.:lol:

Sure I do!
Welcome!
They are both very good! Really good! In fact I like them so much that they are already bookmarked... I mean it, really. ;)
Glad I repaired your spirit :lol:

[Beautifull]

:D awww...i feel honored that you have my poems bookmarked!!! :blush:

[Maximilianus]

:D awww...i feel honored that you have my poems bookmarked!!! :blush:

:blush: Aw! I feel honored that you feel honored :lol:

[Beautifull]

:lol:....i feel honored that you feel honored that i feel honored!!:lol:

[Maximilianus]

:lol:....i feel honored that you feel honored that i feel honored!!:lol:

And I feel honored that you feel honored that I feel honored that you feel honored!! .... :lol: Where's this gonna end, in a madhouse? :lol:

[PrinceMyshkin]

Jot, spot, jot spot,
I enjoyed both of these.
And I hope that writing them,
the first one especially,
did help to ease your pain.

[Beautifull]

:lol:...right now...it ends, okay i get that we both feel honored....madhouse indeed!!

[Beautifull]

the thrill of the wild pounding in your chest,
of having your head filled with daydreams,
to see that someone special everyday,
with anticipation of the next day,

"oh what will he think?"
"oh what will she think?"
you don't know what to think when they're here,
but perfectly clear when they disappear...

what will you do when you can't stop,
when all your mind is filled with is images?
when you finally realize that you are falling...


this was on another thread, but still mine...what do you think?

[Maximilianus]

:lol:...right now...it ends, okay i get that we both feel honored....madhouse indeed!!
Okay! :lol:

the thrill of the wild pounding in your chest,
of having your head filled with daydreams,
to see that someone special everyday,
with anticipation of the next day,

"oh what will he think?"
"oh what will she think?"
you don't know what to think when they're here,
but perfectly clear when they disappear...

what will you do when you can't stop,
when all your mind is filled with is images?
when you finally realize that you are falling...


this was on another thread, but still mine...what do you think?

Cutie, supreme, outstanding and meaningful!
Thought about anyone special as an inspiration?

[Beautifull]

...maaaybe!:blush:

[Maximilianus]

...maaaybe!:blush:

uh, huh!!! Gotcha! :D

[Beautifull]

uh, huh!!! Gotcha! :D

oh no! i'm caught!:sick: :lol:

[Maximilianus]

oh no! i'm caught!:sick: :lol:

:lol: one lucky schoolmate maybe?

[Beautifull]

maybe...okay, yes, he is...thoughi won't be able to see him for another month...summer vaca can be a pain sometimes!!!

how about you? any girl inspire you to write poetry?

[Beautifull]

here's one of my favorites that i posted a while back...

this is a poem i made up a while back....(it's a sonnet)


Roses are redder than daisies of white,
You are my bright and shining light,
Violets are bluer than the deep blue sea,
I just can't live without you,can't you see?

As the days of my life become longer,
My love for you becomes rapidly stronger,
And if my life decided to go on?
I would just have to drag you along.
I just can't live without you, can't you see?
You are the only one who can complete me.

In you gentle hands is where my heart lay,
And there is only one thing left to say...
I just can't live without you, can't you see?
I just hope one day you, too, can say you love me.

whaddya think?

[Maximilianus]

maybe...okay, yes, he is...thoughi won't be able to see him for another month...summer vaca can be a pain sometimes!!!

how about you? any girl inspire you to write poetry?
All ladies inspire me somehow, though I haven't found a specific one... yet :)

here's one of my favorites that i posted a while back...

this is a poem i made up a while back....(it's a sonnet)


Roses are redder than daisies of white,
You are my bright and shining light,
Violets are bluer than the deep blue sea,
I just can't live without you,can't you see?

As the days of my life become longer,
My love for you becomes rapidly stronger,
And if my life decided to go on?
I would just have to drag you along.
I just can't live without you, can't you see?
You are the only one who can complete me.

In you gentle hands is where my heart lay,
And there is only one thing left to say...
I just can't live without you, can't you see?
I just hope one day you, too, can say you love me.

whaddya think?

Wow, that feeling's strong enough! I wish I had a lady writing about me that way! :bawling:
Is he aware of it?

[Beautifull]

All ladies inspire me somehow, though I haven't found a specific one... yet :)
inspire how exactly?:goof:


Wow, that feeling's strong enough! I wish I had a lady writing about me that way! :bawling:
Is he aware of it?

very...though it's not working the way i want it to...i don't think it is going to work...and that saddens me:bawling::bawling:

so i should find another...:sick: not really looking forward to it since my last two relationship just didn't work out right...

[Maximilianus]

inspire how exactly?:goof:
I will soon post a poem about ladies. That will give you a perspective of my feelings towards the strong gender.



very...though it's not working the way i want it to...i don't think it is going to work...and that saddens me:bawling::bawling:

so i should find another...:sick: not really looking forward to it since my last two relationship just didn't work out right...

Sorry to know it! :(
You'll find the right person one day. Probably when you least expect it.
Be patient and keep the hope going! ;)

[Beautifull]

yep..i know that, i'm just impatient, trying to find it myself....

and i can't wait for that poem

[Maximilianus]

yep..i know that, i'm just impatient, trying to find it myself....
Mayhap you should let him find you ;) I can understand though; can't wait myself to be coddled :rolleyes:

and i can't wait for that poem
Just gonna be a lil ;)

[Beautifull]

Mayhap you should let him find you ;) I can understand though; can't wait myself to be coddled :rolleyes:
i can't wait to have someone to understand me...:confused: no one at my house seems to...
have you ever had a friend who knew how you felt, even though you hid it very well(or you thought you did)?


Just gonna be a lil ;)

:banana:

[Maximilianus]

i can't wait to have someone to understand me...:confused: no one at my house seems to...
have you ever had a friend who knew how you felt, even though you hid it very well(or you thought you did)?

My mom and dad understand me pretty well. Of course there are episodes of my life they can't understand because we are different, though these ones are quite insignificant.
Other than that, strange as it may seem, my closest people are on the Internet, and their physical location is pretty far away from me. I haven't found someone near that can be regarded as really near, 'cause people I have near are not really into the same matters I am. I couldn't talk to them about poetry for example, 'cause they don't seem to care at all. I don't mean to judge 'em but I seem to have found that they're rather ... shallow, so to speak :(

Anyway, if you need to talk about anything and can't do it home, I'm all ears. Serious talks are the ones I like best, much better if I can help :)

[Beautifull]

My mom and dad understand me pretty well. Of course there are episodes of my life they can't understand because we are different, though these ones are quite insignificant.
Other than that, strange as it may seem, my closest people are on the Internet, and their physical location is pretty far away from me. I haven't found someone near that can be regarded as really near, 'cause people I have near are not really into the same matters I am. I couldn't talk to them about poetry for example, 'cause they don't seem to care at all. I don't mean to judge 'em but I seem to have found that they're rather ... shallow, so to speak :(

i understand completely...i find the greatest of friends on here...that's why i like this place...or site, or whatever it is!


Anyway, if you need to talk about anything and can't do it home, I'm all ears. Serious talks are the ones I like best, much better if I can help :)

I WILL take that under consideration!!!:nod::D

[Maximilianus]

i understand completely...i find the greatest of friends on here...that's why i like this place...or site, or whatever it is!

It's all that, and more ;)

I WILL take that under consideration!!!:nod::D
Okey-dokey, that's what friends are for, even in the far distance :nod:

[Beautifull]

you make me feel extra special...oops, gotta get off!!

[Maximilianus]

you make me feel extra special...oops, gotta get off!!

We feel what we are! ... mean you're going to bed? ... sleep tight, then!

[Beautifull]

We feel what we are! ... mean you're going to bed? ... sleep tight, then!

awww...so you're saying i'm special?:blush:

yeah, i had to go o bed...parents made me...:lol:

[Beautifull]

Jot, spot, jot spot,
I enjoyed both of these.

Aww! thank you! :redface:

sorry i dodn't see your entry until i was looking back through it...:blush:


And I hope that writing them,
the first one especially,
did help to ease your pain.

yes, writing poem always takes the edge away from most of the most paiful emotions...:)

[Maximilianus]

awww...so you're saying i'm special?:blush:
Am I not sweet? ... :p :lol:

yeah, i had to go o bed...parents made me...:lol:
Tell them to go first! :lol:

[Beautifull]

Am I not sweet? ... :p :lol:

are you buttering me up?


Tell them to go first! :lol:

oh, i don't think that would be such a good idea:lol:

[Maximilianus]

are you buttering me up?
butter up, Informal: to flatter someone in order to gain a favor.
So... what's my gain for being sweet? ... :D
Now seriously, I don't take what I'm not given.

oh, i don't think that would be such a good idea:lol:
Yep, better not... :p

[Beautifull]

butter up, Informal: to flatter someone in order to gain a favor.
So... what's my gain for being sweet? ... :D
Now seriously, I don't take what I'm not given.


okay..you're being sweet.:p

[Maximilianus]

okay..you're being sweet.:p
I'd only ask for a name, ... please... if you think you can... can be through PM if you don't want it public (and I'd give mine too) ;)

[Beautifull]

I'd only ask for a name, ... please... if you think you can... can be through PM if you don't want it public (and I'd give mine too) ;)

:lol: you've convinced me the first time...and it's already sent....and i do expect yours in turn!:D

[Maximilianus]

:lol: you've convinced me the first time...and it's already sent....and i do expect yours in turn!:D

By the time of this post we're properly introduced... so what do I ask now? ... hmm... let's see ... oh, I know, I will ask you for more jots, okay? ... and... Tucson, Phoenix, Yuma, Flagstaff, Winslow...., please?

[Beautifull]

By the time of this post we're properly introduced... so what do I ask now? ... hmm... let's see ... oh, I know, I will ask you for more jots, okay? ... and... Tucson, Phoenix, Yuma, Flagstaff, Winslow...., please?

:lol: this is what you ask someone you just properly met?:lol:

and what would you want to do with those cities anyways?:p

[Beautifull]

the sun
very annoying,
yet needed to live
why do we live by the sun,
you might ask yourself,
well, you person you!
we can't live in darkness!

:D
just a jot...and i really am starting to hate living in this hell on earth!i wish i was :cold:

[Beautifull]

oh, i found another old one!!!!



How many times do I have to say it
Until you listen?
How many days do I have to sit through
Before you'll come to me?

I am here
I was here from the beginning
You just couldn't see
Because you only looked on the outside
Instead of the inside

Just give me a chance
Just one chance
And you'll see
I love you
And I will always always love you

Just give me a chance
Just one chance
And you'll see
How loyal I am
To the one I'll always love

Just give me a chance
Just one chance
And you'll see
I'm not like others
and I can be that perfect person for you

And I'm still here
Waiting for you
To give me a chance
Just one chance


DEDICATED TO THOSE WHO ARE WAITING FOR THEIR LOVED ONES TO FIND OUT WHAT'S RIGHT IN FRONT OF THEIR NOSE...

what do you think?:p or:(

[Maximilianus]

:lol: this is what you ask someone you just properly met?:lol:
Well... I could ask you out, but considering we are in too different Americas I just thought it would be quite a problem... :lol:


and what would you want to do with those cities anyways?:p
Find out if you live in one of them or in any other... but as I mean no pressure on you, I won't insist if you don't want to say it :)


the sun
very annoying,
yet needed to live
why do we live by the sun,
you might ask yourself,
well, you person you!
we can't live in darkness!

:D
just a jot...and i really am starting to hate living in this hell on earth!i wish i was :cold:
I'm currently feeling the :cold: you want so much, but I know how you feel. Our summers are very similar to those of Arizona. :(


oh, i found another old one!!!!

How many times do I have to say it
Until you listen?
How many days do I have to sit through
Before you'll come to me?

I am here
I was here from the beginning
You just couldn't see
Because you only looked on the outside
Instead of the inside

Just give me a chance
Just one chance
And you'll see
I love you
And I will always always love you

Just give me a chance
Just one chance
And you'll see
How loyal I am
To the one I'll always love

Just give me a chance
Just one chance
And you'll see
I'm not like others
and I can be that perfect person for you

And I'm still here
Waiting for you
To give me a chance
Just one chance


DEDICATED TO THOSE WHO ARE WAITING FOR THEIR LOVED ONES TO FIND OUT WHAT'S RIGHT IN FRONT OF THEIR NOSE...

what do you think?:p or:(

I think that If I had the honor to be the inspiration of that poem I wouldn't make you wait a second (I can see what I have in front of my nose, you know? :))

[Beautifull]

Well... I could ask you out, but considering we are in too different Americas I just thought it would be quite a problem... :lol:
....hm. good point!:lol:


Find out if you live in one of them or in any other... but as I mean no pressure on you, I won't insist if you don't want to say it :)
oooohhhh! i thought you wanted the cities!hm...check your PM..i'll tell you another secret.


I'm currently feeling the :cold: you want so much, but I know how you feel. Our summers are very similar to those of Arizona. :(

ugh...i want the :cold: right now!:flare:!oh now i've went and thrown a tantrum:blush:
:D

I think that If I had the honor to be the inspiration of that poem I wouldn't make you wait a second (I can see what I have in front of my nose, you know? :))

awww...there you go being sweet again...:redface:

[Maximilianus]

oooohhhh! i thought you wanted the cities!hm...check your PM..i'll tell you another secret.
Thank you! (shhh... I won't tell anyone :p)



ugh...i want the :cold: right now!:flare:!oh now i've went and thrown a tantrum:blush:
:D
That's understandable! I pretty much do the same when pissed about heat :p



awww...there you go being sweet again...:redface:
I have a feeling that you deserve it :)

[Beautifull]

That's understandable! I pretty much do the same when pissed about heat :p

heat is horribe!:flare:



I have a feeling that you deserve it :)

Do I? Oh thank you:p

[Maximilianus]

heat is horribe!:flare:
I second that! :thumbs_up

Do I? Oh thank you:p
Yes you do and welcome! :)

[Beautifull]

talk to ya later...ciao for now...

[Maximilianus]

talk to ya later...ciao for now...
Bye sweet!

[Beautifull]

sweets!that's what i'll get b4 cleaning!ok bye!

[Maximilianus]

sweets!that's what i'll get b4 cleaning!ok bye!

Uh, huh! So you're greedy for sweets! I'm gonna tell your mom! :p :lol:

[Beautifull]

oh please don't! I just snuck a few of her coated animal crackers!!!
:lol:

[Maximilianus]

oh please don't! I just snuck a few of her coated animal crackers!!!
:lol:

Uh, huh! So you've been a sneaking naughty rascal! How dare you? I'm gonna call your mom right now... just... just... gimme your number right now, lady, so I can call your mom and you be properly grounded! ... :lol: :lol: :lol:

[Beautifull]

Uh, huh! So you've been a sneaking naughty rascal! How dare you? I'm gonna call your mom right now... just... just... gimme your number right now, lady, so I can call your mom and you be properly grounded! ... :lol: :lol: :lol:

:lol: not gonna happen...you can't tell my mamma!;):D

[Maximilianus]

:lol: not gonna happen...you can't tell my mamma!;):D
In that case I give up... go sneak those crackers... but save a few for me! :p :D

[Beautifull]

In that case I give up... go sneak those crackers... but save a few for me! :p :D

okay! will do;)

goodnight.:yawnb:

[Maximilianus]

okay! will do;)

goodnight.:yawnb:

Third goodnight of the night! :p
...
Let's make it four: Goodnight! :)

[Beautifull]

well you kept talking so i kept replying.:D

[Maximilianus]

... what proves we have a good communication! :D

[Beautifull]

very good communication!!!:D

[Beautifull]

me thinks our communication is flagging:(

[Maximilianus]

Not your fault :)

[Beautifull]

still...i feel bad that i didn't even try to tell you sooner...

[Beautifull]

Right or wrong...
Stands for so long.

healthy or sick,
lasts as long as it meant.

but what of love?
does it come from above?
or will it be trapped and crushed?

[Maximilianus]

still...i feel bad that i didn't even try to tell you sooner...
Still... you must have had a good reason.

Right or wrong...
Stands for so long.

healthy or sick,
lasts as long as it meant.

but what of love?
does it come from above?
or will it be trapped and crushed?

... it comes from within... the heart.

[Beautifull]

Still... you must have had a good reason.

still...
... it comes from within... the heart.

sometimes i wonder where people w/o a heart get it from...

[Maximilianus]

I believe unhearted people are incapable of loving, though they can practice the art of deceit, so we must be careful, because they may have no heart at all and find a way to trick us into believing they do have one, which is freaky :cold:

[Beautifull]

I believe unhearted people are incapable of loving, though they can practice the art of deceit, so we must be careful, because they may have no heart at all and find a way to trick us into believing they do have one, which is freaky :cold:

freaky indeed.

[Beautifull]

Hey, where's that poem you said you'd write? been waiting.

[Maximilianus]

Been working on it, though it doesn't fully satisfy me. Gimme a lil more time :redface:

[Beautifull]

mmm....okay, just a lil more.:D

[Beautifull]

...heehee...I remember these days of laziness...have I returned to this?

[Beautifull]

So you think that love is just a game,
You never think about using that name,
Cause you've been stomped on,
Cheated on.
So now the only thing you believe in is the game,
You don't think love can change.
So you keep going through the motions,
Keeping your head away from the sun,
Jus trying to keep on going on...

[Beautifull]

To be so naive
To so much want to crave
Being too scared to pursue
The dream that everyone knew.

[Maximilianus]

Rings a bell... more than one, in fact.

[Beautifull]

Really? Which ones?

[Maximilianus]

Both poems sound similar to a few stories I know, and have been thinking to blog about, but I can't find the time http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs43/f/2009/091/7/7/Clock_Emoticon_by_gamma_normids.gif I already have time troubles with participating in light threads http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs24/f/2008/014/8/0/804d5d8821b1770d.gif

[Beautifull]

:D You're welcome to use those poems if you want. :) They'll just sit here anywhere. They're not going anywhere...:piggy: :prrr: :goof:

[Maximilianus]

Thanks! http://smiles.kolobok.us/personal/hi.gif

[Beautifull]

welcome! just tell me when you finish first chapter!

[Beautifull]

Living a life of hell
yet not even an urge to yell
even when things fall
this time, it's giving it all
just to keep a smile on the face,
laugh if it's the case,
And yet, the heart hurts,
staying on the alert
not giving in for anything
nothing willl make the heart sing
because pain covers everything...

[Maximilianus]

It's as though the person who wrote it was thinking about my condition, or a condition similar to mine. I wouldn't have been able to put it in better words. Thanks for unwittingly reading my mind :)

[Beautifull]

It's as though the person who wrote it was thinking about my condition, or a condition similar to mine. I wouldn't have been able to put it in better words. Thanks for unwittingly reading my mind :)

really? I didn't know...I guess we're in similar situations then :nod:

[Maximilianus]

really? I didn't know...I guess we're in similar situations then :nod:
It seems we are.

[Beautifull]

Are you okay?

[Maximilianus]

I survived Saturday, which was a very bad day at the end of a very bad week. I think I can move on.

[Beautifull]

Yikes. Saturday is my favorite day...Aw you were sad in Saturday? Well, I hope Sunday was a better day for you. :(

I wish you happiness
...
:skep: I wonder if my powers are working right now! I'm working really hard on it! :D

Well, if that didn't work, piggy says hi!:piggy:

:lol:

[Maximilianus]

It works! :)

http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/laugh1.gif

[Beautifull]

Yaya! I did it! :lol:

[blazeofglory]

Living a life of hell
yet not even an urge to yell
even when things fall
this time, it's giving it all
just to keep a smile on the face,
laugh if it's the case,
And yet, the heart hurts,
staying on the alert
not giving in for anything
nothing willl make the heart sing
because pain covers everything...

Beautiful, you stirred the moment and this proves now you have the craft to write poetry most of us are not endowed with. Poetry must pop up effortlessly, a jot down; to rephrase your own terms and you had the gift the one that is rare in this world of machinery minds. You can transport your reader to the serenity of mountains that make us forget this rat race for a while and get drunk in a dreamy world that snares us or enchants into a world that is half real

[Beautifull]

Beautiful, you stirred the moment and this proves now you have the craft to write poetry most of us are not endowed with. Poetry must pop up effortlessly, a jot down; to rephrase your own terms and you had the gift the one that is rare in this world of machinery minds. You can transport your reader to the serenity of mountains that make us forget this rat race for a while and get drunk in a dreamy world that snares us or enchants into a world that is half real

Thank you so much. That means a lot, blaze. I really appreciate your complement. And I'm glad I have someone like you wh always is willing to read my works. :p :blush2:

[Beautifull]

Under the ray that sun transpires
bringing in all that love desires
what do we say?
Do we do what the heart may?
Living for the moment
Acknowledging all that love sent
And yet, still so lonely
only able to see
no touch, no smell of perfume
no sound, no passion to consume
how to live through a life full of pain?
Only by the people we call friend.

[Beautifull]

Under the ray that sun transpires
bringing in all that love desires
what do we say?
Do we do what the heart may?
Living for the moment
Acknowledging all that love sent
And yet, still so lonely
only able to see
no touch, no smell of perfume
nothing to hear, no passion to consume
how to live through a life full of pain?
Only by the people we call friend.

At times when we question our motives and life-paths, it's friends and loved ones who pull us through...:grouphug:

[Maximilianus]

Bright pieces, Beaut. Blaze is quite right in his definition of your talent, I agree :)

[Beautifull]

Bright pieces, Beaut. Blaze is quite right in his definition of your talent, I agree :)

Thank you. :D I feel honored that I have such friends as these, because, truthfully, I couldn't make it without the friends around me. A life without friends is a lifeless life. :D I think that made sense..:lol:

[blazeofglory]

Under the ray that sun transpires
bringing in all that love desires
what do we say?
Do we do what the heart may?
Living for the moment
Acknowledging all that love sent
And yet, still so lonely
only able to see
no touch, no smell of perfume
nothing to hear, no passion to consume
how to live through a life full of pain?
Only by the people we call friend.


Beautiful, there is wonderment in your poem and you have express the very depth of heart all beings seem to feel yet few could express. It really happens when one feels elevated by love yet the hard reality of the world that bars the lover from fulfilling the innate thing the heart craves

[Beautifull]

Beautiful, there is wonderment in your poem and you have express the very depth of heart all beings seem to feel yet few could express. It really happens when one feels elevated by love yet the hard reality of the world that bars the lover from fulfilling the innate thing the heart craves

Blaze, you make me feel like a fraud, because I really do write these on the spur of the moment. And yet, the way you express my poetry, it feels as though I should've worked a long time on them. But I do feel honored that you say that I find what's deep in the heart...that may be true, because if you write a poem as a jot down, really, you don't think about what you actually said until you read back over it. Maybe that's how I am able to conquer what others cannot do...because I don't give my mind a chance to catch up what I'm spilling from my heart. :p

[Beautifull]

Abandoned,
I look for a way out of misery,
trying to find myself again,
yet the solution evades me

[Beautifull]

Abandoned,
I look for a way out of misery,
trying to find myself again,
yet the solution evades me

The only time I'm good at rhyming on the spot is when I'm writing poetry...why is that?

[Maximilianus]

Thank you. :D I feel honored that I have such friends as these, because, truthfully, I couldn't make it without the friends around me. A life without friends is a lifeless life. :D I think that made sense..:lol:
It makes sense. Pity that not everyone sees the sense in it...


Beautiful, there is wonderment in your poem and you have express the very depth of heart all beings seem to feel yet few could express. It really happens when one feels elevated by love yet the hard reality of the world that bars the lover from fulfilling the innate thing the heart craves
I know about elevations, then diving with dead engines and ripped wings... more than I want to... and the epilogue is not the desired one for the crashing protagonist, especially when you haven't been provided a working parachute. Of course this depends on the story being told and the characters involved.


Blaze, you make me feel like a fraud, because I really do write these on the spur of the moment. And yet, the way you express my poetry, it feels as though I should've worked a long time on them. But I do feel honored that you say that I find what's deep in the heart...that may be true, because if you write a poem as a jot down, really, you don't think about what you actually said until you read back over it. Maybe that's how I am able to conquer what others cannot do...because I don't give my mind a chance to catch up what I'm spilling from my heart. :p
Then the spurs of your moments are quite... spurring :D

[Beautifull]

It makes sense. Pity that not everyone sees the sense in it...
Right! So many are blind to it because they are selfish! And crazy :crazy:


I know about elevations, then diving with dead engines and ripped wings... more than I want to... and the epilogue is not the desired one for the crashing protagonist, especially when you haven't been provided a working parachute. Of course this depends on the story being told and the characters involved.
We all have times like that. That's the time to make a parachute out of all the good times and memories, and the support from your friends to make it out alive.:smile5:



Then the spurs of your moments are quite... spurring :D
Thank you! :p

[Maximilianus]

We all have times like that. That's the time to make a parachute out of all the good times and memories, and the support from your friends to make it out alive.:smile5:
I've been doing something like this lately. To some extent, it seems it's had some effect http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/scratch_one-s_head.gif


Thank you! :p
Welcome! http://smiles.kolobok.us/personal/hi.gif

[Beautifull]

I've been doing something like this lately. To some extent, it seems it's had some effect http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/scratch_one-s_head.gif


Well, I am glad it is helping you, the parachute. :p

[Maximilianus]

Well, I am glad it is helping you, the parachute. :p
It almost didn't open... but in the end I managed to convince it... and finally it opened :p Of course I'm just talking about one tiny part of my troubled recent life :p The thing is that lately, I haven't had a single chance to get bored http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/heat.gif

[Beautifull]

It almost didn't open... but in the end I managed to convince it... and finally it opened :p Of course I'm just talking about one tiny part of my troubled recent life :p The thing is that lately, I haven't had a single chance to get bored http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/heat.gif

Well, I wish I could give you some of my free time. It seems all I have is time lately. I feel like I should be using this time...but for what? There's nothing I have to do...I don't start college until the 23rd of next month...
then I'll be the one busy...:sick: homework is like the devil. :devil: It's a burden, yet it gives you the experience you need. Doesn't change the fact that I don't like it though...

And I wish you much happiness in your future. :D

[Maximilianus]

I wish you much happiness in your future, too... and it's about time that you post another poem :)

[Beautifull]

lol. Okay...how about you give me a topic to work with. :) I want to try something a little different.

[Maximilianus]

Let's talk about... stop the mourning... and getting payback... does it sound too vengeful? :p ..... http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/scratch_one-s_head.gif

[Beautifull]

Let's talk about... stop the mourning... and getting payback... does it sound too vengeful? :p ..... http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/scratch_one-s_head.gif

lol. Yeah, but let's see if I can get a good poem from it! :D :p

Pain bubbling from the heart.
Never should have from the start.
Because my heart spun,
now I'm shunned.
'Cause my feelings were unreturned,
inside, my pain burns.
And now, I want them to feel it
the hurt that in me they lit
just to know that they suffered
from not wanting to be my partner,
would be enough to help me,
could ease this pain that won't let me be.

Man...I really....that poem really makes me think of my own pain...and the only reason I'd want them to be in the same situation as me would be just to know the other person does really care for me. That would be the only reason I would want them to feel pain...I am really sorry if there's no "vengefulness" in it...or getting payback...

[Maximilianus]

Don't be sorry at all. It's a very nice and creative piece, and I was only kidding when I mentioned the getting payback part :p I'm not that vengeful anyways :)

Your fast creativeness reminds me of the fast creativeness of someone I haven't met in a long time. She's not often around anymore http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs17/f/2007/186/4/7/_sad__by_Kermodog.gif

[Beautifull]

Don't be sorry at all. It's a very nice and creative piece, and I was only kidding when I mentioned the getting payback part :p I'm not that vengeful anyways :)

That's good. I didn't take you for the vengeful type. So I'm glad. :D


Your fast creativeness reminds me of the fast creativeness of someone I haven't met in a long time. She's not often around anymore http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs17/f/2007/186/4/7/_sad__by_Kermodog.gif

Aw! :bawling: I feel so sad...just like your avatar. I hope you'll cheer up soon. :(

Piggy says hi!:piggy:

Take Care! ~Beau~

[Maximilianus]

This other nice tiny creature says hi to piggy: http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs14/f/2007/045/5/c/Drow_hello_by_Kanuka76.gif

http://smiles.kolobok.us/artists/just_cuz/JC_cheesy.gif

[Beautifull]

This other nice tiny creature says hi to piggy: http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs14/f/2007/045/5/c/Drow_hello_by_Kanuka76.gif

http://smiles.kolobok.us/artists/just_cuz/JC_cheesy.gif

Awww! Your little creature is sooooo cute!

[Maximilianus]

He knows, that's why he smiles so often. He's quite into showing off :p

[Beautifull]

He knows, that's why he smiles so often. He's quite into showing off :p

:lol: WHen I find an adorable creature like that, I'll show him off too! He looks so huggable!

[ReynardKitsune]

hey!! those are very nice poems :D i like the rhymes~

[Beautifull]

hey!! those are very nice poems :D i like the rhymes~

Thank you so much! I'm sorry of the talking...I hadn't expected to chat so much. I hope you could read the poems without the chatting getting in the way!

But when you talk to friends, hey...who knows what conversations pop up! :D

[Maximilianus]

:lol: WHen I find an adorable creature like that, I'll show him off too! He looks so huggable!
:p :p


Thank you so much! I'm sorry of the talking...I hadn't expected to chat so much. I hope you could read the poems without the chatting getting in the way!

But when you talk to friends, hey...who knows what conversations pop up! :D
That was my fault too! http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/dntknw.gif

:p http://smiles.kolobok.us/artists/just_cuz/JC_cheesy.gif

[Beautifull]

We will always be
You and me
Flying so freely
through time we'll be

[Maximilianus]

Brief, yet right to the senses, like a hit between the eyes :p

[Beautifull]

Brief, yet right to the senses, like a hit between the eyes :p

yes, it has a certain ring to it, doesn't it.
Here's some more freestyling.

Let's be free,
Where we'll finally see
Apart is best,
It won't make our love less

And yet I feel
empty and sealed
Nothing coming in or out
never finding out what love is about
but loving every moment
that you and me have been.

We could be friends you say
But that is not what I crave
So if nothing else,
I'll just listen to my own heart pulse...
missing the one I used to listen to
To me, it used to soothe.
but the pain is so intense
it makes no sense

because as much as I want you
I push away and lose
lose my heart, my soul and joy
lose my courage to convey....


How the heck am I supposed to end this one? I just kept on going!

[angliholic]

The songs of the Maker
Are the most soothing of all.
They cure sorrows, heartaches,
and whatever!

And the beauty of it is
That they cost you nothing!

[Beautifull]

The songs of the Maker
Are the most soothing of all.
They cure sorrows, heartaches,
and whatever!

And the beauty of it is
That they cost you nothing!

I love it! It's very catching! :D

[Maximilianus]

And yet I feel
empty and sealed
Nothing coming in or out
never finding out what love is about
but loving every moment
that you and me have been.

We could be friends you say
But that is not what I crave
[/I]
I will extend the conversation to a possibility that may help you continue this poem, if that is what you want. Let's suppose that the story between the two actually took place for a while. People often care mostly about their own feelings and needs. As much as it may hurt, they pay little or no attention at the effects they cause on others. Just to illustrate it a little further, they first draw a picture where you are supposed to be the main character, then they pick an eraser, and start taking you out of the picture very gradually under the belief that you will not notice, and when you notice and ask what's going on, they end up sketching their reasons, but don't expect them to ask you for your opinion. They just won't. They begin it, make it last as long as they want, they end it. You don't have a pencil on their drawing. It's their canvas, their pencils, their strokes, their hands, their moods, their choices... their drawing, not the drawing of both.


How the heck am I supposed to end this one? I just kept on going!
I hope my above comment, inspired by true events that you can find anywhere around any corner, may give you a few ideas.


The songs of the Maker
Are the most soothing of all.
They cure sorrows, heartaches,
and whatever!

And the beauty of it is
That they cost you nothing!


I love it! It's very catching! :D
It is catching indeed. Pity that many people can't find any healing in them, as costless as they may be. When it's not enough, it just won't be enough, although it's just a thought, with all due respect for those who actually feel their soothing effect.

[Beautifull]

I will extend the conversation to a possibility that may help you continue this poem, if that is what you want. Let's suppose that the story between the two actually took place for a while. People often care mostly about their own feelings and needs. As much as it may hurt, they pay little or no attention at the effects they cause on others. Just to illustrate it a little further, they first draw a picture where you are supposed to be the main character, then they pick an eraser, and start taking you out of the picture very gradually under the belief that you will not notice, and when you notice and ask what's going on, they end up sketching their reasons, but don't expect them to ask you for your opinion. They just won't. They begin it, make it last as long as they want, they end it. You don't have a pencil on their drawing. It's their canvas, their pencils, their strokes, their hands, their moods, their choices... their drawing, not the drawing of both.
Very good explaniation Max, I understand completely what you're trying to say. The last two sentences really caught my attention. Thanks for giving me a full explaniation to work with.



I hope my above comment, inspired by true events that you can find anywhere around any corner, may give you a few ideas.
It has given me some more to think about. I may finish that poem off with your help, Maxey! As always, you're a big help!:p Just let me...think for a bit. :)



It is catching indeed. Pity that many people can't find any healing in them, as costless as they may be. When it's not enough, it just won't be enough, although it's just a thought, with all due respect for those who actually feel their soothing effect.

Yes. I understnad what you're trying to say. :nod:

[Maximilianus]

Very good explaniation Max, I understand completely what you're trying to say. The last two sentences really caught my attention. Thanks for giving me a full explaniation to work with.
At your service http://smiles.kolobok.us/personal/hi.gif


It has given me some more to think about. I may finish that poem off with your help, Maxey! As always, you're a big help!:p Just let me...think for a bit. :)
Take your time :)


Yes. I understand what you're trying to say. :nod:
Thanks http://smiles.kolobok.us/personal/hi.gif

[Beautifull]

so it isn't perfected yet,but i couldn't sleep last night until i wrote it down,it stuck to me...:p

Pitter Patter,Pitter Patter,
softly against my window,
while i lay my head to rest,
Pitter Patter.

Splish Splash,Splish Splash.
lightly against the patio side,
even while my pen descends to paper,
Splish Splash.

Drim Drum,Drim Drum,
loudly against my roof,
just as i cozy up on my couch,
Drim Drum.

Drip Drop, Drip Drop,
falling from the sky,
each drop,making a soft melody,
soothing my soul,
Drip drop.

Pitter Patter,
Splish Splash,
Drim Drum,
Drip Drop,
coming together,
to make a melody so sweet,
it soothes all the pain.

This poem from so long ago seems to repeat itself once again. I feel so peaceful, and the rain is just my favorite lullaby. It may be simple, but it never fails to lull me to a peaceful sleep.

[Beautifull]

So I wrote ths a while back, and realized this is exactly the guy I'm looking for...
I want a guy who stays when I tell him to go away
I want a guy who still askes me what's wrong after I say it's nothing
I want a guy who say's "I love you" when I say "I hate you".
I want a guy who believes in romance.
I want a guy who wants to be my friend before he wants to be my boyfriend
I want a guy who'd rather be a gentleman than be cool
I want a guy who calls me beautifull while looking into my eyes instead of looking at my body
I want a guy who will stay on the phone when we still run out of things to say
I want a guy who will be jealous if I even talk to another guy
I want a guy who respects me for my character instead of how I look.
I want a guy who makes me laugh
I want a guy who if I married him, would wake me with a kiss in the morning, and hug me close every night.
But most of all, I want a guy who says I love you every chance he can get, and really mean it.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Wonderful specifications. Now, if you believe in this sort of thing, you have published it to the universe which, hopefully, will soon respond.

[Beautifull]

lol. Yessss. very true...Hear that world? :p :D

[dafydd manton]

Oh, Beautiful, if only I weren't spoken for............. (and 40 years older!!!!!) It's really not too much to ask, either. You'll find it!!!

[Beautifull]

Oh, Beautiful, if only I weren't spoken for............. (and 40 years older!!!!!) It's really not too much to ask, either. You'll find it!!!

:lol: I know. But did you know that for some men, that is too much for them? It drives me crazy, but I appreciate ya! :D

[Maximilianus]

I really hope you really find such a really perfect match :p and by no means would I like to discourage you, but maybe it would be more realistic to content yourself with just a few, or even one of such characteristics you aim at :p because meeting all of such high standards in just one person is rather... difficult these days http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/scratch_one-s_head.gif IMHO, regardless of gender, people of today are not really concerned with the essence of their interactions with a potential darling. What you're describing is an over-humane person, like a flawless super-hubby, and in terms of so much humanity, I've seen most people lagging behind.

Of course there's always the chance that I haven't seen enough, should we give a touch of optimism to my previous words :angel:

However, I wish you the best of lucks in such a tremendous quest... you will certainly need it :p

[Beautifull]

I really hope you really find such a really perfect match :p and by no means would I like to discourage you, but maybe it would be more realistic to content yourself with just a few, or even one of such characteristics you aim at :p because meeting all of such high standards in just one person is rather... difficult these days http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/scratch_one-s_head.gif IMHO, regardless of gender, people of today are not really concerned with the essence of their interactions with a potential darling. What you're describing is an over-humane person, like a flawless super-hubby, and in terms of so much humanity, I've seen most people lagging behind.

Of course there's always the chance that I haven't seen enough, should we give a touch of optimism to my previous words :angel:

However, I wish you the best of lucks in such a tremendous quest... you will certainly need it :p

yesss. It will be hard, but super hubby doesn't exist. Now, I know the perfect man for me does. These characteristics I named off aren't impossible. Quite the opposite. I wonder if this list made you reflect on yourself?

[Maximilianus]

I wonder if this list made you reflect on yourself?
It made me reflect about 2 aspects:

Mistakes I've made
Mistakes people make


By the way, I would very much appreciate the possibility of approaching a lady with the aforementioned qualities too :)

How about that road trip? http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/scratch_one-s_head.gif

[Beautifull]

Awesome road trip. I got to see dolphins in the ocean!!!!

[breathtest]

I want a guy who stays when I tell him to go away
I want a guy who still askes me what's wrong after I say it's nothing
I want a guy who say's "I love you" when I say "I hate you".
I want a guy who believes in romance.
I want a guy who wants to be my friend before he wants to be my boyfriend
I want a guy who'd rather be a gentleman than be cool
I want a guy who calls me beautifull while looking into my eyes instead of looking at my body
I want a guy who will stay on the phone when we still run out of things to say
I want a guy who will be jealous if I even talk to another guy
I want a guy who respects me for my character instead of how I look.
I want a guy who makes me laugh
I want a guy who if I married him, would wake me with a kiss in the morning, and hug me close every night.
But most of all, I want a guy who says I love you every chance he can get, and really mean it.

beautiful Beautiful.

[Beautifull]

beautiful Beautiful.

You think so?

[breathtest]

I really do

Its a nice way to express how you want to be loved.
You should write that on a piece of paper and give it to every man you meet and then tell him to go away if he cant meet the criteria :smile5:

[Maximilianus]

Awesome road trip. I got to see dolphins in the ocean!!!!
Maybe a jot about the dolphins could be appropriate ;)


I really do

Its a nice way to express how you want to be loved.
You should write that on a piece of paper and give it to every man you meet and then tell him to go away if he cant meet the criteria :smile5:
Excellent idea, like a list of prerequisites to apply for the job as Beautifull's hubby :p

[Beautifull]

I really do

Its a nice way to express how you want to be loved.
You should write that on a piece of paper and give it to every man you meet and then tell him to go away if he cant meet the criteria :smile5:

Great idea!...but I wonder if that will scare them off...:lol:


Maybe a jot about the dolphins could be appropriate ;)

Water, like the cold wind on a winter's day,
when the sun sets is when they play,
in and out the dive again,
showing off their dorsel fins
calling to the birds above,
greeting those surfer fans they love
with our admiration, their hearts do we win,
they love to hear, "Look mommy, a dolphin!"

You like?


Excellent idea, like a list of prerequisites to apply for the job as Beautifull's hubby :p

hehe :blush:...well, I wouldn't really say it's a job. That sounds like an obligation....wouldn't it be an honor to be by my side?(I'd like to think...)
But yes....you could say that Max.

[Maximilianus]

Great idea!...but I wonder if that will scare them off...:lol:
These days, people often get scared before even being scared :frown2: Here's what you have to do: wield the list before his very nose. If he's not able to comply with it, then he's not the right darling, and you should do something like http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/beee.gif should he ever insist :D


Water, like the cold wind on a winter's day,
when the sun sets is when they play,
in and out the dive again,
showing off their dorsel fins
calling to the birds above,
greeting those surfer fans they love
with our admiration, their hearts do we win,
they love to hear, "Look mommy, a dolphin!"

You like?
In my opinion, I would call it a brilliant oceanic pastoral http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/drinks.gif


hehe :blush:...well, I wouldn't really say it's a job. That sounds like an obligation....wouldn't it be an honor to be by my side?(I'd like to think...)
But yes....you could say that Max.
I was kidding :p Of course it would be an honor http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/yes3.gif

[Beautifull]

These days, people often get scared before even being scared :frown2: Here's what you have to do: wield the list before his very nose. If he's not able to comply with it, then he's not the right darling, and you should do something like http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/beee.gif should he ever insist :D
:lol: You're absolutely right. I shall do that. :lol:


In my opinion, I would call it a brilliant oceanic pastoral http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/drinks.gif

Aw, thanks!



I was kidding :p Of course it would be an honor http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/yes3.gif

Of course. Who do you think I am? Beautifull, of course. :lol:

[Maximilianus]

Aw, thanks!
http://fc06.deviantart.net/fs51/f/2009/270/5/d/You__re_Welcome_Sign_by_Mirz123.gif


Of course. Who do you think I am? Beautifull, of course. :lol:
:patriot:

[Beautifull]

http://fc06.deviantart.net/fs51/f/2009/270/5/d/You__re_Welcome_Sign_by_Mirz123.gif

Heehee. cute welcome!



:patriot:

That's right, salute me! haha! Just Kidding. :D

[Beautifull]

There's a loneliness in her eyes,
She can't seem to erase
She looking to the skies,
With no answer

(it's a work in progress...)

[Maximilianus]

Looks promising :)

[Beautifull]

Clipped Wings

Spiraling, spiraling down
screaming and yelling without a sound
hard to lift up what's pushed down
not a hint of confidence, not a ounce or pound

my wings are clipped
and I'm falling to the lowest pit.
I see my demise
filled with hopelessness and cries

how am I supposed to find a new road,
when buried benaeth this heavy load
Clipped wings won't help me fly above
and see what's needed to be done,

so I spiral out of control,
not able to protect my soul.

my demise is near.

[Delta40]

I like the theme of this poem. The downward spiral, the inability to soar above one's own destiny with death inevitable.

There is a slight overuse of same words which do not add to its value. Spiral, clipped and demise. Perhaps you could give the reader a deeper imagery rather than in the context in which they are repeated.

[Maximilianus]

The theme and how you develop it are both sharp :nod: and Delta's opinion sounds noteworthy :nod:

[Beautifull]

Thanks. On my way to make changes. :p Thanks Delta and Max. :D

[Maximilianus]

Welcome http://smiles.kolobok.us/personal/hi.gif and anxious to spot the changes, if there are any, or whatever... just anxious to read... something :p

[Beautifull]

So I did some revisions. Does it sound better or worse?

Clipped Wings

Spiraling, spiraling down
screaming and yelling without a sound
hard to lift up what's pushed down
not a hint of confidence, not a ounce or pound

my wings are cut down
and I'm falling to the lowest pit profound.
I see my demise
filled with hopelessness and cries

how am I supposed to find a new road,
when buried benaeth this heavy load
Severed wings won't help me fly above
and see what's needed to be done,

so I plummet out of control,
not able to protect my soul.

my end is near.

[Maximilianus]

In my humble opinion, this version sounds more elaborated, hence more poetic. I think so :nod: :hurray:

[aliengirl]

I like the way you have used some words repeatedly. They sound good to ear. The title reflects the theme of hopeless surrender quite well. Keep writing.

Best wishes. :)

[Beautifull]

In my humble opinion, this version sounds more elaborated, hence more poetic. I think so :nod: :hurray:

Yay! :D Thank you.


I like the way you have used some words repeatedly. They sound good to ear. The title reflects the theme of hopeless surrender quite well. Keep writing.

Best wishes. :)

Aw, I thank you so much!

[Beautifull]

SHOULD I WORRY?
Lost in thought
Not for naught,
He's on my mind
Is his love out of line?
Are his actions worthy?
Should I worry?

Flattered I am,
A respectable man.
Am I wrong for wond'rin
whether he's full of sin?
Or if his words are worthy,
And It's wrong that I worry

Sounds as nice as can be
Sad am I, he comforts me.
when anger rages,
the emotion, he purges.
Am I wrong to worry,
Are his words worthy?

A chance should be given,
for his feelings to be proven
I'm afraid it'll go wrong
and I was right all along.

Should I worry?
Is he worthy?

[aliengirl]

SHOULD I WORRY?


No dear, not at all. But frankly speaking you can't help it. The more we are uncertain about something the more we worry, moving like a pendulum between happy and horrible thoughts.



Is he worthy?

Give him a chance to prove. He must have some special quality which attracted you. Just wait to discover more. Anyway, lucky guy.

A nice little jot on the whole. :nod:

[Beautifull]

No dear, not at all. But frankly speaking you can't help it. The more we are uncertain about something the more we worry, moving like a pendulum between happy and horrible thoughts.

Give him a chance to prove. He must have some special quality which attracted you. Just wait to discover more. Anyway, lucky guy.

A nice little jot on the whole. :nod:

Thank you for the comment and advice. :p
And yes, he is special.

[Maximilianus]

We never finish to know anyone, since everyone has some surprise under the sleeve that makes us start the assessment all over again. Like Forrest Gump stated, "life is a box of chocolate. You never know what you're gonna get".

[Maximilianus]

I needn't say it's yet another beautiful piece of writing, right? :)

[Beautifull]

I needn't say it's yet another beautiful piece of writing, right? :)

You don't have to, but it's always good to hear. :p

[Maximilianus]

In that case I'll just say it. It's yet another beautiful piece of writing :nod:

[Beautifull]

:lol: Thank you! I never get tired of hearing that. :p

[Maximilianus]

Ahem... I noticed :p

[Beautifull]

:lol:

[Beautifull]

I look around lately, at all that happens around me, and even myself, and I realized a few things. I came up with this poem, but I can't seem to name it.

It never ceases to amaze me,
The fragility,
Of friends connecting
And love collecting

It never fails to amaze me,
The strong bond breaking,
Best friends parting,
The meaning leaving,

And yet we don't stop,
We grasp a lot,
Our feeling, not for naught,
As we look for what sought.

Companionship,
Kinship,
Friendship,
Fellowship

And understanding of ourselves.

[Maximilianus]

You may consider to name it "I'm so amazed because I look around excessively." :p

[Beautifull]

Hehe. Kinda long...how does "Trying to Understand" sound? Does it match the poem?

[Maximilianus]

Affirmative :thumbsup:

[Beautifull]

Awesome! ok. I'm gonna post it with the name now. :D

[Beautifull]

Trying to Understand

It never ceases to amaze me,
The fragility,
Of friends connecting
And love collecting

It never fails to amaze me,
The strong bond breaking,
Best friends parting,
The meaning leaving,

And yet we don't stop,
We grasp a lot,
Our feeling, not for naught,
As we look for what sought.

Companionship,
Kinship,
Friendship,
Fellowship

[Maximilianus]

http://i1005.photobucket.com/albums/af178/maxicastro/Smileys/smileypolite.gif?t=1287881256 http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/good2.gif

[Beautifull]

cool happy face!

I'm gonna jot down a quickie now...

Giving thanks
for the life around me
I see love
all around me
from the family
who's always by my side,
to my friends
who in my heart always abide
I give thanks
for not being lonely,
for always having someone
who's thinking of me.

Happy Thanksgiving to everyone(even if yo don't celebrate) :D

[Maximilianus]

A very beautifull sentiment, and beautifully expressed :)

[Beautifull]

tank u!

[Beautifull]

Live laugh or love,
no matter if you're above
or below
don't say no,
just smile
endure for a while
and embrace living
and be happy.

[Maximilianus]

Your poem expresses a very nice sentiment, Beaut. Even when...

just smile
endure for a while
and embrace living
and be happy.
never fails to elicit trouble for me http://smilys.net/nachdenkliche_smilies/smiley1943.gif http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/dntknw.gif

[Beautifull]

Your poem expresses a very nice sentiment, Beaut. Even when...

never fails to elicit trouble for me http://smilys.net/nachdenkliche_smilies/smiley1943.gif http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/dntknw.gif

:lol: Aw. Just hang in there. I promise you'll have some ups....I just can't say your downs will disappear. Hey, our ups and downs are the roller-coaster of life! :p

[Maximilianus]

:lol: Aw. Just hang in there. I promise you'll have some ups....I just can't say your downs will disappear. Hey, our ups and downs are the roller-coaster of life! :p

I think I know what you mean by roller-coaster. My guts feel the ups and downs quite often, very much like the following yellow fellows' guts:
http://i1005.photobucket.com/albums/af178/maxicastro/Smileys/montana_rusa.gif

[Beautifull]

:lol: Yep.. Very much!

[Beautifull]

Never once thought
I'd be free from the love I sought

Never once tried to
that one feeling lose

Never once wanted
to be from love instead

But I live right now,
with friends allowed,

but not needing the comfort of your embrace.

[Maximilianus]

How bad I skipped this poem, Beaut :( I'm truly sorry. With all the university tasks coming from everywhere I neglected this thread unintentionally :(

I think I understand what it means. This afternoon I was listening to a song that reminded me of this poem. I feel they somehow match each other: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EGIrE190z3I&feature=related

I apologize, though I don't think I have an excuse :(

[Jerrybaldy]

never thought, never tried, never sought, never wanted... made me think of life just happening regardless, as it does. I therefore missed this too.

[Maximilianus]

I can agree with that... life happening regardless.

[Beautifull]

How bad I skipped this poem, Beaut :( I'm truly sorry. With all the university tasks coming from everywhere I neglected this thread unintentionally :(

I think I understand what it means. This afternoon I was listening to a song that reminded me of this poem. I feel they somehow match each other: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EGIrE190z3I&feature=related

I apologize, though I don't think I have an excuse :(
Oh, what a lovely melody. So sad, yet I like it.


never thought, never tried, never sought, never wanted... made me think of life just happening regardless, as it does. I therefore missed this too.
Well said in a simple way. :D

I'm glad you both read it though! :p It was so long ago that I posted this, huh? I can't blame you.

[Beautifull]

I wanted to be the last one
I wanted to be the one that won.
But I couldn't understand you right,
And still I wondered if you lied.
I thought it didn't make a difference
and from that day since,
I thought I could leave you behind
and let another guy n my sight.
But here I stand
After how much I've ran
finding out where my heart has been
Even after the year we'd been separated
And certain of one thing too...
I love you.

[Maximilianus]

Two fragments from a certain song that might serve as a reply to the above piece:

I watched the clouds drifting away,
Still the sun can't warm my face.
I know it was destined to go wrong.
You were looking for the great escape
To chase your demons away.

(...)

You gave up the fight,
You left me behind.
All that's done's forgiven.
You'll always be mine
I know deep inside.
All that's done's forgiven.

(...)

http://smilys.net/winter_smilies/smiley1851.gif

[Beautifull]

Aw. Sad....hey, what song is that, if I may ask?

Time and time again,
through pain and sadness
time and time again
yes, I've been put through the test,
Time and time again,
I looked away
And time and time again,
I thought of you the whole day,

Over and over,
I found myself falling
Over and over,
Of my love, I kept lying
over and over,
I could smile
cuz over and over,
I thought of you all the while

And although you're gone,
I'll never see you again,
It won't be long
That I'll smile again.

Okay...so probably one of the crappiest jot down's in my short history...but I can't be sad right now. I just keep smiling because I'm so happy. :D

[Maximilianus]

Aw. Sad....hey, what song is that, if I may ask?
Forgiven, by Within Temptation (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k6mQXa_0fyQ&feature=fvwrel)
There might be better sound quality versions on Youtube. The above video is from the Black Symphony concert of 2008... better sound on DVD, of course, but yes, it's indeed among their saddest songs. A song about life itself :(



Time and time again,
through pain and sadness
time and time again
yes, I've been put through the test,
Time and time again,
I looked away
And time and time again,
I thought of you the whole day,

Over and over,
I found myself falling
Over and over,
Of my love, I kept lying
over and over,
I could smile
cuz over and over,
I thought of you all the while

And although you're gone,
I'll never see you again,
It won't be long
That I'll smile again.
http://smilies-gifs.com/amarillos/7amarillos.gif http://www.smileyshut.com/Respect/respect-062.gif


Okay...so probably one of the crappiest jot down's in my short history...
I don't think you've ever written a piece of crap http://smiles.kolobok.us/artists/just_cuz/JC_shakehead.gif

[Beautifull]

Forgiven, by Within Temptation (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k6mQXa_0fyQ&feature=fvwrel)
There might be better sound quality versions on Youtube. The above video is from the Black Symphony concert of 2008... better sound on DVD, of course, but yes, it's indeed among their saddest songs. A song about life itself :(
I think the message is a nice one. :p And it's beautifull. BTW, it's a good quality one. :D


http://smilies-gifs.com/amarillos/7amarillos.gif http://www.smileyshut.com/Respect/respect-062.gif
:p thank you mister


I don't think you've ever written a piece of crap http://smiles.kolobok.us/artists/just_cuz/JC_shakehead.gif

Aww! You say the nicest things Maxey! :crying: Thank you!

[Maximilianus]

I think the message is a nice one. :p And it's beautifull. BTW, it's a good quality one. :D
Glad you liked it! http://smiles.kolobok.us/personal/hi.gif


:p thank you mister

Aww! You say the nicest things Maxey! :crying: Thank you!
Very welcome! http://yoursmiles.org/tsmile/hug/t4604.gif http://yoursmiles.org/tsmile/bouquet/t4421.gif

[Tournesol]

so it isn't perfected yet,but i couldn't sleep last night until i wrote it down,it stuck to me...:p

Pitter Patter,Pitter Patter,
softly against my window,
while i lay my head to rest,
Pitter Patter.

Splish Splash,Splish Splash.
lightly against the patio side,
even while my pen descends to paper,
Splish Splash.

Drim Drum,Drim Drum,
loudly against my roof,
just as i cozy up on my couch,
Drim Drum.

Drip Drop, Drip Drop,
falling from the sky,
each drop,making a soft melody,
soothing my soul,
Drip drop.

Pitter Patter,
Splish Splash,
Drim Drum,
Drip Drop,
coming together,
to make a melody so sweet,
it soothes all the pain.

Beautifull, I think that your poem is jsut that: beautiful.

I like the simple things in life, like rainfall. And just as you said in your poem, rainfall is sometimes all you need to lift a depressing mood, or to make you feel like you can make a fresh start. It's great, I love it, I wouldn't change a thing!

[Maximilianus]

That's among my faves, too. It should be framed and neatly hanged on a big wall :)

[Beautifull]

Beautifull, I think that your poem is just that: beautiful.

I like the simple things in life, like rainfall. And just as you said in your poem, rainfall is sometimes all you need to lift a depressing mood, or to make you feel like you can make a fresh start. It's great, I love it, I wouldn't change a thing!
Why, I thank you deeply Tournesol! And it's true. I look forward to the rain, since it scarcely visits my abode. It always makes me feel so soothed. :p even just thinking about it....

That's among my faves, too. It should be framed and neatly hanged on a big wall :)

Aw, really? I don't think I should go that far....

[Maximilianus]

Aw, really? I don't think I should go that far....
If you don't go that far, then I will http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/yes2.gif :)

[Beautifull]

Aw Thank you Max! You always make me smile.

Here's a very(very very very) small jot I made in Trig about a week ago.

Love lives
life gives
give love

Cute, eh?

[Maximilianus]

Aw Thank you Max! You always make me smile.

http://smilies-gifs.com/hola-adios/13hola-adios.gif


Love lives
life gives
give love

Cute, eh?
As soon as I read this I began wondering about possible anagrams, and I came up with a few curious renders, two of which curiously caught my attention:

Love's evil vile veil of eve gigs http://smiles.kolobok.us/artists/just_cuz/JC_thinking.gif

and...

Love's evil. Evolves if I give leg http://smiles.kolobok.us/artists/just_cuz/JC_shakehead.gif


Don't get me wrong, Beaut, I'm not ignoring the cuteness of your lines. However, I can't help thinking that whenever we touch subjects like "love" or "life," something else happens, including finding a hidden message within an anagram :p ... If I keep flyin' this recklessly, my plane's gonna crash fo sho http://yoursmiles.org/psmile/pilot/p0502.gif :rolleyes:


On another note, some say that anagrams do hide portions of hidden truths. For example, they say that if we anagram our names we may find meaningful information about our personality, or even our destiny... how to know http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/scratch_one-s_head.gif

[Beautifull]

Thanks for the words of wisdom. These three lines were made up in a matter of two seconds while being bored during a lecture.

[Maximilianus]

Well, I'm not sure of how wise I might be. I'm aware I may have gone a bit over the edge with what I said :p But I needed to say it. It's a feeling that suddenly visited me, this thing about the anagrams, and I just felt the urge to experiment and then post :rolleyes: Anyway, I still believe that anagramming can take us to curious places http://smilies-gifs.com/pensando/6pensando.gif

[Beautifull]

When you fall, fall hard, so you have no regrets.
When you fly, fly high so you can catch your silver lining.
When you soar, soar far to push yourself further.
When you love, don't forget to fall hard, fly high, and soar far.
That's the best kind of love.

So, not really a poem, but a jot. Hope you like the five lines! :p

[tailor STATELY]

Enjoyed your jot. I see it as an untitled poem none-the-less.

I have a problem with L1. It makes sense when L4 is revealed, but not alone. For instance my first thought was of when I totter over from a turned ankle, which is frequent and quite painful; for this I have regrets. I can't think of a remedy for this, and it may even be moot, for most readers may find the correct connection from the start. Just a thought, on your jot.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[Maximilianus]

Well, yeah, at a very first sight a fall is mostly perceived as a physical accident :p but in the end, there are more than just one way to fall I'm afraid ... would be a lot easier if it were just an ankle thing http://smiles.kolobok.us/artists/just_cuz/JC_shakehead.gif

I liked it too, Beau! http://smiles.kolobok.us/artists/just_cuz/JC_goodpost.gif

[Beautifull]

Thanks for the feedback guys. I did have a problem coming up with how to word that line...I was actually going to go along the lines of "When you fall, fall hard so that your success is greater when you get up" But....that's just a little too long...

[Maximilianus]

Not only would it be long, and therefore break the rhythm, but it would also be quite obvious, pretty much like the classical ""he who laughs last laughs best" or something alike. I think you chose the correct wording in the first version http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/good3.gif

[Beautifull]

Thanks luvv. Makes me feel better. Now I don't have the urge to try and change the original

[Maximilianus]

Very welcome! http://yoursmiles.org/csmile/friend/c0417.gif

[Beautifull]

Seasons and cycles
and routines and my thoughts
all have one thing in common,
circling, going up and down.

>.< Kinda how I feel right now.

[Maximilianus]

I understand the feeling. Life is such a variable twister we hardly ever know where it's gonna take us :frown2:

[Beautifull]

I understand the feeling. Life is such a variable twister we hardly ever know where it's gonna take us :frown2:

Yeah. It's always changing, isn't it?

Here's another one:

Never know
Until you lose it,
What you had,
N how you abused it.

[Maximilianus]

I'll somehow reply to this. In the meantime, I'll place a suitable smiley http://smilies-gifs.com/pensando/6pensando.gif

[Beautifull]

Can't sleep. Decided to jot down. Felt like rhyming. Blah. What should it's name be?


There was a person I thought I loved,
But what I was in love with was love.
Chasing after what I wanted to think,
Yet what I thought, I soon didn’t believe.
Love’s not what you pick and choose,
More than often, you usually lose.
There’s only once, if you’re lucky,
When you win, but don’t get too cocky.
You may win, but your winnings,
Live, breathe , and have feelings.
Trying to be high and mighty,
You’ll lose that which for you were fighting.

[Beautifull]

A poem. Seems like I express my emotions the most through my poetry.



One plus one equals two,
and two and two equals four,
I only wish it was that easy,
to figure life out more,
because when once it seems,
like it's all figured out,
one little thing,
can turn my ideas foul.

[Maximilianus]

True. Math is often simpler than life itself, although ironically most of life is made of math :rolleyes:

[Beautifull]

True. Math is often simpler than life itself, although ironically most of life is made of math :rolleyes:

Haha. So true!

Here's another. I put it on fb too:

Thought he was perfect,
Thought he was right,
But I guess I can do better,
And then I'll hold tight.

Lately, since I have nothing else to do but sleep, eat, get on the internet, and think, I've been thinking a lot about the past. That's where this one came from.:yesnod:

[Maximilianus]

Ah, the past, so behind and yet so close! http://smilies-gifs.com/pensando/6pensando.gif