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kelby_lake
05-17-2008, 05:19 PM
It was a grey day when Alexander saw the tennis court that he had shied away from for so many years. His hands gripped the cool wire fence surrounding it and he squinted his eyes to stare in. He sighed. Something had gone from there, a vivacity- the green surface had faded and the net sagged. Alexander hardly dare try the door's handle, so much had passed since then, but he eventually committed his hand to the handle and pulled the door. Locked. Perhaps as well, people shouldn't revisit their pasts. At least not too much. Many a game Alexander had played on here, and he remembered them, it, all of it...

DickZ
05-19-2008, 08:07 AM
Well, you certainly have our attention with this introduction, and I hope you'll continue the story.

Unless Alexander has only one eye, it might be better to say 'he squinted his eyes' than to leave it singular. It's an unnecessary distraction that makes the reader wonder why he only has one eye.

kelby_lake
05-19-2008, 05:10 PM
edited- thanks!