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kelby_lake
05-12-2008, 02:58 PM
you might crumble, fall and fade
but that is not, is not enough
you might tremble as you look through our photos
cry rain from our honeymoon hotel balcony
slam your fist against the wall in fury
but all of that is not enough

you might sigh back for those lost days
but that is not, is not enough
you
wish you could remember little details
write poems on your misery
but all of that is not enough

i might burn the gifts you gave me
but that is not, is not enough
i could smash all the windows and bleed for you
desperately try to banish you from my mind
lock all the doors and throwaway the keys
cry like a baby and fall to my knees
but all of that is not enough

but if despair should be the hand that thrusts the dagger
don't do that, it's far too much

PrinceMyshkin
05-12-2008, 06:29 PM
What an extraordinarily strong poem! And your repetition within the lines of "is not enough" has just the effect I think you intend, of someone sort of choking on her despair.