Sunshine

[subterranean]

Where are you sunshine?
The roses are starting to fade away
And butterflies are mourning everyday
Even rainbow doesn't know
What colors to show?
Because only cold that is left
Such a cruel cold, with no inspirations
O sunshine, don't hide away
This heart is freezing in loneliness
Hear this soul aching in pain
Longing to feel you, to enjoy your scent
To touch and to be touched
The light that shines brighter than all
That has given me hopes and happiness
Nothing compares your beauty and warmth
The roses of my heart are fading away
And my rainbow is starting to loose its colors
Sunshine,
I am loosing my self without you

[Jay]

Love this one SubT
fave lines:


This heart is freezing in loneliness
The roses of my heart are fading away

[subterranean]

Thanks Jay...i finnaly got the courage to post my poem :)

[Jay]

It's really good SubTee :), I like the way it gets from general to personal, l like first it's about light, flowers, then the flowers become your heart and the light 'you'.

[subterranean]

Thanks Jay, it's boosting up my confidence in this poetry thingy..:)
i'll post some more later

[Jay]

If it's as good as this one... don't let us waiting too long ;)

[Jester]

yeah, i second that, great poem, sub :thumbs_up

[amuse]

Wow. first sunshine as nature's big lamp, and then it seems like the sunshine's a person too, and oh i really like this one. so sweet and beautiful and sad too. wonderful piece, sub. i read it out loud.

[subterranean]

now im so red guys...:blush:

Thank you all...i appriciate your comments..

And you know, this is the poem i sent to intl. library of poetry :mad:

[Jay]

Lost on the meaning, Sub :blush: (re the library comment)

[Jester]

poetry.com..... they're mean ppl trick you into buying a crappy book with your poetry in it i think theres a thread in the literature network forum... wiat a mintue

[Jay]

oh, that thing, got it Jes, thank you :)

[Jester]

http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=2558

there it is

this is what led me to this site... did a google search on poetry.com and found this, loved the site so much i stayed and hijacked all the thread in the gen chat forum ;)

[subterranean]

well i think everyone is a hijackers in her/his own fa place after all :D

But im so sorry i sent it to them...those tricksters

[rocksea]

the theme is good, apt and you have brought it out nicely.
simple and expressive.
though missing the sunshine, reading through ur poem
and talking abt sunshine, i am feeling a bit warm,, http://malumovies.com/modules/Forums/images/smiles/icon_flower.gif

[subterranean]

Thank u rocksea...and by the way didnt i warn you about using un-official emoticon? it's illegal ya know...;)

[mono]

Very impressive, subterranean. I have never come across any of your work on the forum, but sometimes neglect wandering through this area. Your use of words and expression sound perfect, and flow as softly as the wind; the subject, though a seemingly topic one, you brought alive beautifully. Well done, and I look forward to reading more.