My Poetry, by GoofyFlamingo

[GoofyFlamingo]

finally getting around to posting something!

- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -


Hallway

Everyday in the halls you pass
Every single day I see you
As we get close, I look away
And wonder if you saw me too?

I see you with her in the halls
Passionately kissing on the corner
I see discontent in your eyes
Do you really truly want her?

Or do you want me? I want to scream
To yell, to shout, to cry
Are we made for each other? I want to say
But instead I listen as you sigh

Once again you are alone
Looking for 'the one' that will surpass
She's standing right in front of you
In the shadows of the halls you pass

[GoofyFlamingo]

another poem!
i seem to be stuck in love poetry....
- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -


Once Upon a Time...

Sweep me off my feet
Hold me, I'll never fall
Knight in shining armor
Dancing at the ball

Perfect hair, Perfect dress
Perfect prom, Perfect date
Best friend and a limousine
Never early, Never late

But life is not a fairy tale
and I can't play the part
A Damsel in Distress
Left with a broken heart

[ShadowFire]

It is obvious the emotion behind both but you convey it very well. I personally like the "Hallway" better, but that is my opinion. Yet in the second poem I like your last stanza. It brings it back to reality with a powerful last line. Thank you for sharing your poetry I look forward to reading more.

[GoofyFlamingo]

Falling
falling into the darkness that consumes me
longing only to let go and be free
if time would stop, i could see
why i fall so quickly
trapped by hunger
but i cannot eat
stuck in anger
i admit
defeat

[GoofyFlamingo]

Space

the space between us
grows smaller
as we hug
the hug
of best friends
with deep understanding
of the pain and suffering
faced every day

yet the space between us
small though it becomes
is a barrier
in thoughts
in actions
in emotions

I easily tell you
how I feel
and know you
do the same
but
one thing
I can never say

though I say I love you
the true depth
of my love
is not felt
for though I love you
with a passionate yearning
to know you
to hold you
to never let go
you see us as friends
and nothing more

I wish to be held
to hold you tight
just to be
together
whisper in your ear
look you in the eyes
touch you
and feel
that you love me

[ScarlettEclipse]

I enjoyed your Once Upon a Time Poem...ha I love the whole damsel in distress thing. That poem was great along with Falling. In Falling it was nice how the words were set up that and they all flowed nicely together.

[blazeofglory]

finally getting around to posting something!

- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -


Hallway

Everyday in the halls you pass
Every single day I see you
As we get close, I look away
And wonder if you saw me too?

I see you with her in the halls
Passionately kissing on the corner
I see discontent in your eyes
Do you really truly want her?

Or do you want me? I want to scream
To yell, to shout, to cry
Are we made for each other? I want to say
But instead I listen as you sigh

Once again you are alone
Looking for 'the one' that will surpass
She's standing right in front of you
In the shadows of the halls you pass



Goofy, you are very honest and true to your words. It exactly happens in life and in point of fact love is like that and one behaves in the exactly same way when attractions are there.

[GoofyFlamingo]

On the Dance Floor

The noxious beat
Slows, but never stops
Would you like to dance?
I gaze into
His mismatched eyes
I’m locked within his glance
Everything
He says to me
You are beautiful tonight
Speechlessly
I blush and sigh
My hold around his neck grows tight
I feel his hands
Lightly on my side
You are special to me
I wish he
Would find the strength
When I look into his eyes, I see
The song ends
Much too quickly
Why did it have to end?
I look to him
He doesn’t see me
Why are we just friends?

[ScarlettEclipse]

Aww...your poem is sad...I really like the flow though and where you used italics.

[Pendragon]

looking for title suggestions. i really suck at titles!

- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -

the space between us
grows smaller
as we hug
the hug
of best friends
with deep understanding
of the pain and suffering
faced every day

yet the space between us
small though it becomes
is a barrier
in thoughts
in actions
in emotions

I easily tell you
how I feel
and know you
do the same
but
one thing
I can never say

though I say I love you
the true depth
of my love
is not felt
for though I love you
with a passionate yearning
to know you
to hold you
to never let go
you see us as friends
and nothing more

I wish to be held
to hold you tight
just to be
together
whisper in your ear
look you in the eyes
touch you
and feel
that you love me
Perhaps just "Space" would say it all for a title? Lovely poems! :)

[ShadowFire]

You have done very well. I always enjoy your poems. It is neat how you used the size of the text in "Falling" to add to the effect. The one Pendragon refers to as "Space" is interesting. The emotion really expresses itself in the fourth stanza and flows into the last one. The begining stanzas seem to set up the fact that you are in everyday conflict but once you present the fourth stanza, you show a whole new conflict that is bothering you: him seeing you two only as friends when you want to be more. It is very well written and I really enjoy reading it. But my favorite has to be "On the Dance Floor". I like how you included some of his speech in italics. Though how much you care for him and how you seem good friends, it would appear by his words that he cares about you to a high level. It seems such a special moment you caught in the poetry. I am overwhelmed by the amazing emotion in it too. I will read more of your poetry for sure. Thank you for sharing.

[GoofyFlamingo]

Unfeeling

i do not feel hunger
but i know i am hungry
and though i have food
i cannot eat
and though i force myself to chew
i cannot swallow
for when i do, i feel hunger
and i don't want to eat again

i do not feel pain
but i know it hurts
and though i bleed
i cannot stop
and though i force myself to withdraw
the cut won't heal
for when it does, it will scar
and i want to cut again

i do not feel anger
but i know i am angry
and though i cry
i cannot defend
and though i force myself to bite my tongue
i cannot stay silent
for when i do, anger builds
and it all hurts again

[ShadowFire]

I love the structure. Of the three, I like the last stanza the best. You can tell you are a good poet just in the fact that you capture so much emotion. The feeling just flows from the words. Keep it up. Thanks for sharing.