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MomNcollege
04-16-2008, 01:38 PM
I jumped head first into college while being out of school for 8 years. So i do have a paper due, and she takes off a letter grade for fragments among other problems and desperatly need to pass this class...This not a true story so brace yourself!!! Please understand that im not at all good with this so bare with me
My Brother Is his Own Worst Enemy

“Very often we are our own worst enemy as we foolishly build stumbling blocks on the path that leads to success and happiness” Louis Binstock wrote. A quote that hits home for millions but for one impraticular. My brother James is his own worst enemy as he runs from job opportunity. He also is attending marriage counseling while continuing an affair, and he is also on drugs while taking anti-depressants.
While it is certainly true that he is cognizant of his responsibilities. He has a wife supporting the two of them. She is a certified nursing assistant and cannot live comfortable raising him as if he was a child. He will go as far as to the point of an interview. Thirty minutes into it they would ask him to do a drug test. He would become rude, obnoxious and walk out. Theres been plenty of jobs where by “the grace of god” passed a drug test but when someone scorns him or corrects his doing he will just quit. Hes ran out of temporary job company's from Greenville to Spartanburg. When reality does hit him and i mean hit him hard. They better build some more temporary job placements or hes gonna be up the creek without a paddle. He has stopped looking for a job. He would rather sit in front of the computer and play pogo games for badges so he can dress his miniature couch potato. He runs from job opportunity because he knows he needs to pass a drug test, commit to the workforce and he'd miss his computer.
Additionally, One year ago James and his wife Amber starting going to marriage counseling. They have been having a lot of hard times. One year ago James met someone. He has continued the relationship throughout the sessions they've had in counseling. Isn't a cheating husband an oxymoron? Isn't an oxymoron to be trying to fix your marriage and still continuing an affair? Amber knew of the affair and forgave him. While one affair ended another one was brewing. Even though he was not physically holding another woman. He was holding onto the keyboard. He's having an affair with the computer these days. They are currently going back to marriage counseling.
On top of no job and cheating, James is a drug addict. A drug addict taking anti-depressants. He is only depressed when he doesn't have cocaine or pot in his system. He's an avid pot smoker and is committed to the number 420. His psychiatrist prescribed him anti-depressants to help him with the detox of drugs. Come on now you cant give a drug addict prescribed medication. He's only detoxing because he cant afford it majority of the time . He will go as often as possible to give plasma to buy a ten dollar dime bag. They give like twenty dollars but he needs the other ten for the munchies he occurs after.
Finally, James was brought up right. He knew right from wrong. In the end we all make bad choices at one point of time in our lives. In reality we are or own worst enemy. As we get older, precious time on this earth gets shorter. There comes a time in life when you must stop doing what is comfortable and start doing what is right.


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kasie
04-18-2008, 05:10 AM
Good morning MomNcollege -I've sent you a Private Message about this thread. Can I help?