Can you offer advice on my poem?

[kelby_lake]

Will you read this poem please?
For critics to admire
Or laugh, or tease, just as you please
Whatever you desire

I think I have a lot to say
But I sit and wonder how
To say, or write, perhaps to fight
Those feelings I have now

So maybe perhaps I keep shut
And you may never know
My secrets, lies, all I despise
But maybe it already shows.

[DCD1979]

Great way to get people use to your style of writing about what you write. Good work Kelby.

:) Deanna

[neptune's girl]

Hi Kelbie -
I love poems that really make you think when you read the last line, and yours did that for me. Thanks for sharing!