Echo in the Wind

[Auriga]

Echo in the Wind

Across the mountain tops, along corridors
of an abandoned building,
on the streets, reverberating from house to house,
an echo longs…

It longs to find the one place in the world
that will hold him tight,
the one place that will caress its
deepest desires and dreams.

The echo repeats its call, hoping for a response;
hoping for a reaction from the world;
a sense of acknowledgement.
The echo longs… it longs for its voice.

[PrinceMyshkin]

What an unexpected turnaround at the end - and it gave the whole of the poem a haunting quality. Way to go!

[blazeofglory]

Echo in the Wind

Across the mountain tops, along corridors
of an abandoned building,
on the streets, reverberating from house to house,
an echo longs…

It longs to find the one place in the world
that will hold him tight,
the one place that will caress its
deepest desires and dreams.

The echo repeats its call, hoping for a response;
hoping for a reaction from the world;
a sense of acknowledgement.
The echo longs… it longs for its voice.

The echo longs for its voice!! This is a wonderful expression. That in fact entails something about poetry, for poetry can express at times the depth of human sentinments or that where no other forms of art can fail poetry suceed.

This expression suffices and in fact here the poet confuses us, and in poet of fact a poet is a man of vision like a spiritualist and they have a different world to live in, for they can see a dimension we oridnary people can not visualize.

Here I am confused as the voice is real or the echo is real. That which is real is a matter that needs to be pondered over.

I do not know why this poem penetrated deeply, and touched the layer of me, the deepest layer.
I request the poet to continue writing poetries, for he has an insight, that is oridnarily not available.

[Auriga]

Thank you for the very kind words, Blaze of Glory. You always have very insightfull things to say about almost anything I've seen you talk about.

The point I was trying to get across, be it right or not, or even the points taken by those who read it (which are right in their own accord) was that the echo is just as important as the voice which utters its words. On another, metaphorical level, it's saying that the words, or the echo (which is what spoken word, essentially, is)are empty without a speaker who understands why he's speaking them.

Surprisingly, I was inspired to write this after hearing a quote from a Star Trek movie, hehe.

[asilef73]

i love the lonely, searching quality in this. excellent job. thanks for sharing it.