the nod design

[lakeside_girl]

hope you like....i just did the second write yesterday so it's rough to say the least. i think it has potential, though.


the nod design

since eden, man will always fight
to eat the fruit of seer's sight

dragons are not maddening things
until a man, his mind takes wings (yeh, i hate the "s" on wings..need idea)

eastern, western, astral sign
all the dragon/man design

intrinsic beast, temporal door
to camelot, and all before

and all to come, back to the start
circle of high suffering art

man and dragon's nneds are same
changing scenes of wild and tame ( i think i hate this line...sigh)

man is earthly, flesh and bone
to see he seeks the perfect* stone (ref. to the alchemy stone/philosopher)

man is brave but without power
so tastes the magic sunrise flower

now mind of man, a wild nation
fever and hallucination

beckoned now, dragon appears
to man's most indulgent fears

man is viking, man is knight
he'll bleed for dragon's awful sight

his sword is strong with medicine
he pierces the dragon's skin

dragon must now turn and run
through fever field delirium

dimming beast knows day is done
sight swells to oblivion (i hate the two redundant couplet sounds in a row)

wings, they fold as thoughts they slow
lulled, it paces to and fro

at last it tires, falls asleep
that is when man tends to weep



i realize there is no punctuation, but it isn't cadenced yet...so, i would love a suggestion or many...thanks for looking at it! (i hope it sounds and looks proverbial...i wanted simple language and simple lines..let me know?