Title or none,I wrote this.

[symphony]

The dusk is hanging there in the window
like a lonely Correggio painting.


The day was like a fresh fruit.
Its memory’s lapping my lips


like the juice of a fresh fruit—
It was as bright and bursting.


And it gave theories, explained how.
Then it did more, went more ahead.


We bore our gods in us. Gained much, or
thought we did. We did more, went more ahead.


We reasoned, debated, explained,
knew how. Built, broke, and built again.


Now the dusk thaws the sun into
a red liquid and pours it into my room.


I drink from its sepia tones, the warm chiaroscuro,
I drink the blood of the day and its sun.


It’s time for the crimson night,
and it gives only questions, only asks why…


Why?


April 4, 'o8

[PrinceMyshkin]

Wow! This seems like something of a new direction for you, more mystical and surreal. It's beginning to look as if having exams to study for is a great spur for you to write more poetry instead!

I like this very much.

[symphony]

It's beginning to look as if having exams to study for is a great spur for you to write more poetry instead!
*guilty smile*

[Pendragon]

That first line is certainly a hook which snares the reader and draws one onward to the ethereal depths of the poem's waters... Well done! http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/Four/yoda.gif

[symphony]

I was hoping for some help regarding the title....
anyone?

[Pendragon]

"Ethereal Depths" didn't grab you? ;) :p

[symphony]

Heh i was thinking about something lighter...

(I'll give "ethereal waters" a thought, though... sounds okay)

[symphony]

This is weird. "Windows" has been bumped up again and this is going down-er every minute? C'mon fellas, "windows" is history! :p

Anyway, this remains open to any comment or criticism, though i guess (by the amounts of views and that of comments) it is erm...unworthy! :(

[ReynardKitsune]

drink the blood of the sun! i love that idea :D is there a hidden meaning to it? this poem gives me a gothic feeling of a vampire xD awesome

[symphony]

vampire? lol not what i had in mind while writing it. ;) but interesting nonetheless. :p

as for hidden meanings, i usually try to make my poems as clear as possible, but perhaps i myself wasnt so sure this time? :p

[forcedtobe]

symphony, were you by chance talking about when you go to church early in the morning and drinking the whine?
my church is a little different from others so i dont know exactly what others do at their church, but is that along the lines of what you were talking about?

i like the poem, it seems simple yet not so simple at the same time :)

[symphony]

symphony, were you by chance talking about when you go to church early in the morning and drinking the whine?


No...

[ahsiam]

as i told you this poem showed a new style in you. i love it and love the poem too. you go girl ! :)

[ReynardKitsune]

yea go!