Soulful Eyes

[Pendragon]

Soulful Eyes

Have you ever taken notice of those dusty windows that stare
and wonder about the people sitting behind them all alone?
Life is not always kind, nor is fate always truly fair—

many start out with everything, only to end up nowhere,
their wealth turned to ashes, and their hearts cold as stone…
Have you ever taken notice of those dusty windows that stare

from the walls of a prison, with bars partially blocking the air,
where slowly people rot away for crimes, their time crawling on—
Life is not always kind, nor is fate always truly fair—

or people would not live in those awful crumbling rat-infested homes on the square.
But the poor of the world shiver in wind that cuts clear to the bone.
Have you ever taken notice of those dusty windows that stare

down upon the passersby with an odd, ghostly glare,
and the buildings themselves seem to sigh with dreadful moans
reminding that life is not always kind, nor is fate always truly fair—

and you feel as if your very soul were being examined and laid bare…
At times like this you can almost hear the entire Earth groan.
Have you ever taken notice of those dusty windows that stare,
life is not always kind, nor is fate always truly fair—

Pendragon
© April 2, 2008

[Sweets America]

OH!!!! This is so wonderful, brilliant!!!!! :banana: :eek: :eek2:

I LOVE IT! The rhymes sound great, not forced or anything, this is such a wonderful work, this must be very difficult to create! The form is excellent, and the content wonderful, wow!!!

:thumbs_up :thumbs_up :thumbs_up :smash: :smash: :brow:

[PrinceMyshkin]

I was alerted to look at this by the poetry imp who wanders, half shod, through these corridors, who said You must look at the latest poem by Pendragon. It's brilliant!

And for once, she is right!

What pleasure you must get in wielding your mastery of this form! I rather feel you own it!

[Pendragon]

Thank you both, very much. :blush: I do love the form, it allows me to be very creative. The difficulty lies in getting a first stanza. If you do not have a strong first and third line, since they must repeat, you are going to have trouble, but once that first stanza is settled, the flow comes rather well.

[symphony]

how d'you do that?!!