The first tiny bit of my play- what do you think?

[kelby_lake]

I'm only going to put a little bit in order to gauge interest- what do you think?
Would you want to see this play?:




(Curtains open. Eve Danes, a woman of about 32 who is thin, pale, and plain, sits in the middle of her living room, crying and holding a phone loosely in her hand, rocking backwards and forwards)

Eve: I've lost the baby? I can't have lost the baby...I never lose anything. Never lost a race, never lost anything at school, never lost my parents in a shop...so how could I lose a baby? Things don't just die- people don't lose things like that.

(rocks and looks at door)

He said he'd come, why hasn't he come...

[Lote-Tree]

I'm only going to put a little bit in order to gauge interest- what do you think?
Would you want to see this play?:




(Curtains open. Eve Danes, a woman of about 32 who is thin, pale, and plain, sits in the middle of her living room, crying and holding a phone loosely in her hand, rocking backwards and forwards)

Eve: I've lost the baby? I can't have lost the baby...I never lose anything. Never lost a race, never lost anything at school, never lost my parents in a shop...so how could I lose a baby? Things don't just die- people don't lose things like that.

(rocks and looks at door)

He said he'd come, why hasn't he come...


That is a very "small" bit.

Never lost my parents in a shop...is that meant to amuse...beacause it appeared amusing...

[kelby_lake]

Slightly amusing. She is afterall having a mental breakdown so we have to have some levity...

[PrinceMyshkin]

Yes, it IS such a little bit and there is nothing as yet to pique my curiousity. A woman has "lost" a child or embryo and what one assumes to be the father of that child has not shown up when expected. It's a downer, so far, and some people are indeed hooked by downers per se, but I am not. I need some particular reason to grieve with this particular woman.

[kelby_lake]

it's not the husband that's come- it's the father.

quick summary: devout christian Eve Danes has a drunken one-night-stand with an accountant following a fight with her husband. She keeps this quiet until she becomes pregnant, when her husband concludes that she must have had an affair seeing as he's impotent. nevertheless he really wants a child and so vows to be a father to it and bring it up with Eve. Unfortunately the baby is a stillborn and arguments and revelations occur from the farcical to the frightening.