Resurrection

[dibyendra]

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Resurrection (Final Edit)
Here, my stagnant life needs a flush
And my pallid life thirsts for the splash of colors.
Sprinkle rich spring colors on my jaded existence
Just like spring bestows vivid colors to the flowers
else I will just fade away being weathered.
Liberate me for sometime from all the obligations,
Because I long for traveling somewhere where there's serenity,
Somewhere countryside, closer to the nature,
Or faraway from the city and modern insanity,
Where I could find tranquility,
Hearing the pleasant flow of the river,
And listening to the melodies of the nature.
I wish to walk barefoot on the wet grassland
Caressing the fresh breeze, and relishing this amazing nature.
I yearn to plunge into the fresh river water and
In the cascade of water, I want to dance like crazy.
From the elevated cliff, I desire to watch
The chains of stunning mountains
During the glamourous sunrise and sunset,
Lying on the lap of the mother nature.
I desire to fly high to the azure heavenly skies
To glide without any worries
With my eyes closed and my hands stretched.
Ah, how pleasing it is to dream about
Reaching higher to touch the islands of clouds and
To drift with the wind like a feather.
Coming back to the Earth, on the marshy land,
I wish to sprint frantically, Yelling and screaming,
flushing my moribund and melancholies.

*I would like to thank Pendragon a lot for his suggestions and rectifications.

[dibyendra]

Please post your view regarding the new version. :)

[dibyendra]

Human Life

Aren't we all waiting desperately
for someday for some miracle to happen
to live extraordinarily for some moments in this mortal life
apart from this sublunary life?

Aren't we all seeking desperately
for the reasons why
we all are here in this solitary planet
and arguing everyday if the God truly exist?

Aren't we all living this life enigmatically?
Always trying to solve this mystery;
mystery about the life and death,
wondering if this is an eternal cycle?

[Pendragon]

Regaurding "Resurrection", Dibby, I think you went out of your way to find poetic words, and in doing so, went too far, it breaks the flow to use so many. Let's see here:



Resurrection

Here, my stagnant life need a sheer flush need should be "needs" sheer? would you take "complete turn around"?
And my pallid life thirst for the splash of colors. "thirsts"
Sprinkle rich spring colors on my jejune existence not "jejune" but "jaded" You want worn out, not sophomoric
Just like spring season bestows vivid colors to the flowers drop "season"
else I will just fade away being weathered.
Liberate me for sometime from all the obligations,
Because I long for traveling somewhere there's serenity, "to travel somewhere where there's"
Somewhere countryside, closer to the nature,
Or faraway somewhere from the city and modern insanity, drop "somewhere"
Where I could find tranquility,
Hearing pleasant flow of the river, "the pleasant"
And listening appeasing chirping sounds of the birds. drop "appeasing" add "to"
I love to walk barefoot on the terrain of wet grassland drop "the terrain of"
Caressing fresh breeze, and relishing this amazing nature. "Caressing the"
I yearn to plunge into the abundant fresh river water and drop "abundant"
In the cascade of water, I want to dance like crazy.
I wish to glide without any worries in the endless sky,
Kissing the rain, walking on the islands of cloud, and floating like a feather. drop "and"
On the Earth, I desire to sprint into the marshy land
Yelling and screaming, flushing my stagnancy and melancholies."moribund and melancholies"


Only suggestions, your poem! :) :thumbs_up

Pen

[dibyendra]

Dear Pen, Thanks a ton for your suggestions and rectifications. I'll go with your suggestions. Thanks for your time Pen for reading and providing suggestion to this piece. :thumbs_up

[Pendragon]

You are more than welcome, Dibby. And I should point out that you went with some of my suggestions, but found ways to say other things differently on your own. You only needed encourgement, which is what we all need from time to time. The poem is your own writing! And it sounds great! When life has stagnated as long as mine has, that poem is exactly what I need to read for a lift, up to those islands of clouds, listening to that river flowing, watching flowers bloom... nice! Well done! :thumbs_up

[dibyendra]

You are more than welcome, Dibby. And I should point out that you went with some of my suggestions, but found ways to say other things differently on your own. You only needed encourgement, which is what we all need from time to time. The poem is your own writing! And it sounds great! When life has stagnated as long as mine has, that poem is exactly what I need to read for a lift, up to those islands of clouds, listening to that river flowing, watching flowers bloom... nice! Well done! :thumbs_up

Dear Pen, Thank you once again for your support and encouragements. You're so kind hearted person. I'm really glad to get your comment. Really appreciated! :thumbs_up

[dibyendra]

Any comment regarding this final edit would be highly appreciated.

Thank you.

With warm regards,
Dibyendra

[dibyendra]

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To the buds

Stem,
Nurture these buds
To unveil the underlying beauty.
Thorns,
Safeguard these delicate buds.
Flower,
Shelter them from the disaster and
Make them beautiful like you.