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Tarquin
03-24-2008, 11:34 AM
Inside a Murderers mind.

Outside looking in
on something presumed to be dead
eye holes placed inside this empty shell
all shes trying to do is yell
she's inside afraid to look out
A wall shes built between herself
she believed to be true
what was told to her
not yet willing to die
inside a murderers mind

lost and Helpless

To the ground I fall
the sky's out of reach
I'm broken and I'm scared
is it left or right from here
up above seems so big
while I'm here so small
all around is the black
so dark and miserable
and it rains and it pours down on my head
There's no one here for miles
dead silence all around
no fire in this dark
no flame to keep me warm
no one to keep me safe
I'm dying in my head
no one to hear me scream
all my insecurities, my insanities
all my pain in just one day cannot escape from here
in my grave is where i lay
drowning in my woes, my sorrows and my hopes
Get me outta here
to a place where i can see
just one ray of light
in my dark disease

ShadowFire
03-24-2008, 03:37 PM
I like them both, but I truly love the second one. I just feel the same way and can relate and make the connections to my life. I know that sounds so normal to say on this site, but the second one speaks volumes to me and I just love it. You did a very good job.

Tarquin
03-24-2008, 04:09 PM
Thanks so much! :D I like the second one better as well. though it needs a title, any suggestions would be great :p thanks again.
.Quinn.

ShadowFire
03-24-2008, 04:39 PM
I don't know if this is taken or fits, but how about a title with the word "helpless" in it?....Just a thought. I am no good at naming titles myself so....it is up to you because you are the poet.

Tarquin
03-24-2008, 06:26 PM
that sounds really good, thank you so much!