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lucidnightmares
03-24-2008, 11:25 AM
fall into the depths of yourself
a lonely world or reflection
mirrored radiance
burning your will to live

everything is beautiful
nothing is pure
everything is wonderful
but nobodies sure

a rose is painful
yet we adore it`s grace
beauty is awful
but it has it`s place

without beauty,
we wouldn`t judge
lose our duty
to hold a grudge

and without the light
shadows would fade
we`d lose our blight
discard our facade

for perfection is hideous
and beauty tainted
our flaws make us human
our desires give way to evil

Tarquin
03-24-2008, 11:41 AM
I really like this, it is very good!
'everything is wonderful but nobodies sure' and
'a rose is painful yet we adore it's grace'
are my favorite. :)

ShadowFire
03-24-2008, 03:51 PM
I agree with Tarquin. I like the part "a rose is painful yet we adore its grace" also. I find the last stanza to be so true and well written. I like the style you used to write the poem. Well done and keep it up. Thank you for sharing such a cool poem.

lucidnightmares
03-25-2008, 02:50 PM
wow
thank you both very much
i wasn`t so sure how this one would come out, but i guess it was worth it:D