johnlennon30
03-18-2008, 03:09 AM
If I gave you a rose for St. Valentine's Day
Would you get annoyed, or would it be okay?
If a gave you chocolates in a heart-shaped case
Is it alright, or would you curse me to my face?
If I gave you a card...
Nah, I shan't dwell on old movie lines
For all I have to say is HAPPY VALENTINE'S!
How can I improve this? Is it too mechanical and unlike free verse?
Let me know, please!
Would you get annoyed, or would it be okay?
If a gave you chocolates in a heart-shaped case
Is it alright, or would you curse me to my face?
If I gave you a card...
Nah, I shan't dwell on old movie lines
For all I have to say is HAPPY VALENTINE'S!
How can I improve this? Is it too mechanical and unlike free verse?
Let me know, please!