Confessions Of An Inner Storm

[aadil]

I posted a rough version but then decided to not post until the final one is ready-will edit it into the final one as soon as possible-sorry for the inconvenience:)

[dauthi]

The format is inspired but becomes tiring and a little bit miasmic after a while. While "would've" is a legal contraction, I feel like "would have" would be more powerful and lend more cadence to the poem.

I like all of the lines that start with "If I..."

I profess to not understanding the poem in the least bit though. The last two lines especially dumbfounded me.

[Xcape]

Had me from beginning to end

[aadil]

dauthi i appreciate ur feedback-i'll look into it

thanks xcape for ur comment