story of a pornai.........

[ahsiam]

pornai was in the bottom among the list of prostitutes in ancient greece.but i didnt use it in that meaning. i just use it as a general meaning.




she had a veil
but her dark red lips were showing
she had a wild look
that captured him
she had a dress
but her body curves were showing.


as he observed her closely
she took up her veil
god himself took care of her beauty
and he became the slave of it.



she had a body language
that was a lute to him
it killled him with soft notes
as the chords tuned
the world became a rainbow.



"you have money?!"
this is the first time he saw her lips moving
when the words entered him he was shocked.
"why are you so surprised? i am a pornai. i count sex on money."
he became more stunned
he wanted a girl not a body
with no words he shoved some notes in her hand
which they call money
and strode away.



she stared at his way
and she had a thought-
she is a prostitute
and this is a commercial world
she earns food with her beauty
does that mean they will treat her as a commodity?
she wanted her beauty to be loved
not to be sold.
she didnt want to be under a vintage roof
she just wanted to be a girl under a blue sunny sky.
she sighed....
and left her dreams under the same sunny sky.

[lucidnightmares]

at first i had no idea where this was going, but that was part of what i enjoyed.
just a girl looking for love, but was cursed with beauty, a delicate flower that was pruned and sheered for amusement.
powerful and heartbreaking.

i thought the closing thought was perfect, all of her feeling in a single phrase.

she just wanted to be a girl under a blue sunny sky.
she sighed....
and left her dreams under the same sunny sky.

very interesting and different, i really enjoyed it
thanks

[ahsiam]

thanks lucid for your read and for your thoughtful comment. it gave me pleasure that you enjoyed it.:)

[dibyendra]

Very stunning poem Ahsiam. Very well written as well. Last stanza meant everything here.



she starred at his way
and she had a thought-
she is a prostitute
and this is a commercial world
she earns food with her beauty
does that mean they will treat her as a commodity?
she wanted her beauty to be loved
not to be sold.
ahe didnt want to be under a vintage roof
she just wanted to be a girl under a blue sunny sky.
she sighed....
and left her dreams under the same sunny sky.

Keep up your good work Ahsiam! :thumbs_up

[ahsiam]

thank you dibyendra. :D
your words will be my inspiration.

[scarlet pain]

wonderfully expressed i've really started to think that u see people with their own eyes.thats a wonderfull quality in a good poet.i love ur outlooks and feelings.
i would really wish you'd neverstop writing and you'd express yourself just the way you do.

[symphony]

I keep stumbling upon the logic and emotion behind 6th line last stanza.

And the last 3 lines? Wonderful. W-o-n-d-e-r-f-u-l.

[ahsiam]

thanks symph and scar. you guys always take me high.:)

[scarlet pain]

SCAR hmm sounds hot i think i like it...........

[scarlet pain]

actually not hot sounds dangerous i like dangerous

[ahsiam]

funny..............