glower

[essentience]

down on me
you gaze
with your
glowering
lancing
gale force
storm, sternly
warning me
against changing
my better judgment
for worse days
to come

and the future
looks at me
from around the
corner of its
blind alley
allaying my fears
not one bit

[Jay]

like the alliteration of g's in the first part of the first stanza, though I like the last stanza better, esp.:


and the future
looks at me
from around the
cornerof its
blind alley

darkish, nevertheless nice
you kind of reminded me or a 'lost' member who once used to frequent here, anyone remember Firestarter? She liked dark stuff, too :).

[amuse]

i like this one. very present.

[Jester]

I like how you personified the future as looking down the ally with a face.... i wonder what the face of future would look lik eif it stared me down bleakly???