Realization

[dibyendra]

Realization

Tried
all my life
not to fall

Crawled,
moved on, not to stop
But reached nowhere

Promised
to start a new life
with passion

Died
more than living
Oh my wretched life!

Strove
to take that chance
But been rejected all the time

Shattered
just like the shards
of a broken glass

Failed
several times
This is not the first time

Ashamed
of my own poor fate
Too prone to failure

Cried
the thousand tears
staring at my own reflection

Smashed
the mirror being frustrated,
But still the fragments only reflected my broken dreams

Relieved
myself finally, thinking
there's a sunrise after every sunset,
and failure might be the key to success

Realized
I’m not the only one
There are thousand others
wailing lonely,
cursing to their fate
in the dark...
hoping and praying,
crossing their fingers,
thinking
tomorrow will be alright....


Please provide your view regarding this poem. :)

Thank you.
Love,
Dibyendra

[Sweets America]

Scary poem. I say scary because it echoes some of my fears.

[dibyendra]

Scary poem. I say scary because it echoes some of my fears.

Scary? Really?

[pbmn]

Yeah, I wouldn't say scary so much as, well, true. All I can really say about this is wow. It was really good, and it made a lot of sense.

Just a quick question about this line:


just like a shards


Did you want to have the "a" in there, or is that a typo? It could be the...

[dibyendra]

Yeah, I wouldn't say scary so much as, well, true. All I can really say about this is wow. It was really good, and it made a lot of sense.

Just a quick question about this line:
Did you want to have the "a" in there, or is that a typo? It could be the...

Thanks Pbmn for correcting me. I've corrected now. I would like to thank you for your comment.

[ReynardKitsune]

it depicts my feelings exactly when i felt down it was really great

[dibyendra]

Thanks Reynard for your comment. The one who have or had gone through this way understand more deeply and you've felt that.

[dibyendra]

Please read the updated version. I rewrote this poem again and reordered several lines and stanzas and added more stanzas. I wrote this poem while being frustrated of too many failures in life. I wish to see your feedbacks regarding this poem.

[dibyendra]

I've updated this poem with some additional lines and also modified few words. This could be the final edit. Any suggestions, comments, or critiques are welcome. :) I could make it even more better if I could get more views regarding this poem.

[ShadowFire]

I would like to state that you are my first post ever on this site. I have been reading many poems by you and many others. But I wanted this poem to be my first post. I love it very much and it has stronger meaning to me. Probably because I am one of those "thousand others" mentioned in the last stanza.

[dibyendra]

I would like to state that you are my first post ever on this site. I have been reading many poems by you and many others. But I wanted this poem to be my first post. I love it very much and it has stronger meaning to me. Probably because I am one of those "thousand others" mentioned in the last stanza.

Thanks ShadowFire for your comment. I'm glad that after many days, I heard from someone who felt the depth of this poem. Thanks again. :)

[jon1jt]

dibyendra, am I right, your poetry has taken on a new style? It appears less conversational, which is fine. Your other poems have a sincerity about them that seems to have dissolved a bit here due, perhaps, to the shorter, punchy lines.

[dibyendra]

dibyendra, am I right, your poetry has taken on a new style? It appears less conversational, which is fine. Your other poems have a sincerity about them that seems to have dissolved a bit here due, perhaps, to the shorter, punchy lines.

Thanks Jon for your feedback. The style was really unintentional. While the time of writing being frustrated, I realized something finally and gave a title "Realization", otherwise, it would had been full of frustrations which I would have ended differently. I usually write conversational poem while going to bed for a sleep and I guess you are talking here about earlier poem "Sleeping with the ghost". Is that correct Jon? That is my personal favourite and yes the style was intentional in that poem. :)

[kiz_paws]

dibyendra, I loved this poem and the way it flowed from despair to hope. Well done indeed! :thumbs_up